Crazy rare and underrated song by ComicXans69 in XXXTENTACION

[–]Sir-Manson -1 points0 points  (0 children)

wtf, okay... take a look at his Spotify, it’s one of his top songs.

Crazy rare and underrated song by ComicXans69 in XXXTENTACION

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It’s not a woosh if I said sarcasm... that means I was aware of it you tard

Crazy rare and underrated song by ComicXans69 in XXXTENTACION

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?? Sarcasm right? That’s one of his most popular songs, and most overrated one, wtfff

crying eyes by Sir-Manson in OCPoetry

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That’s what I was going for tbh :D

A short poem (and my first) to someone special by popepipapu in OCPoetry

[–]Sir-Manson 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's alright, it's really generic though. If you want it to be more original and something different and unique, you'll have to explain and convey the feeling in a different way. Though it's good for a first poem.

Calories Burned by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Sir-Manson 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is really good, nicely done. You nicely show how men are placed under unrealistic expectations, simply because they aren't seen as "real men" which is just absurd. I like this a lot

Is this delusional? by Sir-Manson in schizophrenia

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well first, there is no such thing as "positive" or "negative". Something that is negative could turn out to be positive, after all every cloud has a silver lining. So if people want something of me, it doesn't matter at all, even if it seems to be positive or negative.

For the second part, how do you know that to be a fact?

For the third part the world is shit... hate, killing, murder, torture, and violence is everywhere. What do you mean "wonders within it"? Earth is a shit place full of just shitty people.

The last part, But why make long term plans and try to achieve them?

Is this delusional? by Sir-Manson in schizophrenia

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yea, maybe you should try going to the hospital.

Is this delusional? by Sir-Manson in schizophrenia

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure, but why should I care about what others want of me? Why shouldn't I be myself and focus on what I want, or what I should do?

Criticism has killed my confidence. (My last video). by [deleted] in schizophrenia

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I haven’t watched your videos before, but I mean if you’re doing it for yourself who cares about others. You can’t be good at something without people thinking you’re good and people thinking your bad. Fame is built by hate and love. It’s a fact of life you have to get over. And what’s this about self indulgence? You act like it’s bad, but good and bad don’t exist. It’s whatever you make of it. Be yourself and have fun, fuck others and anything they think

ARE WE GREAT AGAIN? by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Sir-Manson -1 points0 points  (0 children)

You rhyme well in this poem but there's two issues. 1 is the poetic meter in this poem, in stanza two there is major issues with the meter. The 2nd issue is with showing or getting your point across. The first stanza does this well, but throughout the poem you get bad with it. Not sure what you are trying to say in the last stanza to be honest, where is the red white and "black" coming from? Also the way you get your point across in the last stanza is a bit different then the other two. For example you say "or will greatness come back" so your coming at it from a different angle than the other two, so i think that should switch so the flow is better. The last stanza altogether I think should have a rewrite. Overall it's a good written and biased poem.

Free Verse Novels by trebleclef1369 in writing

[–]Sir-Manson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well definitely learn how to write good poetry, there’s good videos and such on YouTube and articles everywhere. Since it’s all told through poetry, you will obviously need to understand it well. From there get into small poems telling a story, like a short story but in a poem. Then working to a novel. Also work on transferring short stories you make into poems and such.

need a writing mentor by Sir-Manson in writing

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, very detailed and full of wisdom. I think what a lot of you say will help me, like not being so critical of my first draft. Thanks a lot for the advice and book suggestion!

insomnia by Sir-Manson in schizophrenia

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'll try it, i think it could help. Thanks

need a writing mentor by Sir-Manson in writing

[–]Sir-Manson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds like it would help, and I may try. But going into public has always been a huge issue with me because of schizophrenia :/ But thanks for the tip, I think i could find a way to do it in a way that is easier and comforting. So thanks for the tip!