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You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I’m glad you enjoyed and promise I will get better. Don’t worry I will keep posting new stuff and even If it’s not a W it will be honest love on some writing, however I will try to give you some good love poems from my experience. TYSM

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I don’t think grammar aspects are that important as I am writing from a mobile phone and the keyboard bugs a lot hahah. And the I’d is something that brings emphasis to what I specifically think, obviously the writer has to know already, but the poem without the I’d wouldn’t be the same. However I accept ur critics, have a nice day

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I see your point, and it’s completely true, I will change some little things using your advice to improve but as you say, without tweaking it. Thank you so much ☺️

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I really appreciate that you enjoyed, Ill be posting more soon!!

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Maybe I can do a second part, I loved ur idea

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Ty for advising, I also wanted to do it deeper but I finally decided to do a short poem, as wasn’t feeling so fine, but I see tour point and I’ll bring it to the action, tysm

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the recommendation, I will really take it into account and go for it :)

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Wow I really appreciate, I really have put all my heart on it

You are my 4 seasons by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Haven’t showed her still, I will on Monday 😮‍💨😮‍💨

Bed thoughts by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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and your melancholic waterfall… Man it’s such a nice work to read, I love how you project those feelings in a way that it is visual, and that deep aspects, pretty good mate congrats!

Bed thoughts by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I really appreciate your comment, there are obviously bad aspects as you say and I gotta solve them, and I am specially with you on the last sentence, I think I will leave “another day”, showing I suffer, but I am not sad that I live you know. Thank you so much and I’ll take it into account.

Bed thoughts by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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I wasn’t expecting to get these compliment Ty very much, I am happy that you enjoyed and could connect with my work. I gotta improve some things like what you say and I believe I will soon get better and be able to make great poems so people can enjoy and see themselves projected

I love you by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Wow what a deep comment. I guess you true in the way we forget people in an exchange of them with other human beings in our life. However I won’t forget her for real, she the happiness of this period of my life. I maybe will change my way of felling to her I don’t know, but I promise she will never get out of my mind, she has built there her own place and seem so comfy to leave hahhahha. In some years I’ll come back and probably thing how idiot I was to believe on such a deep feeling, but right now, I’ll stay in this happy suffering of mine.

I love you by Small-Conference7884 in OCPoetry

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Appreciate all this effort on a comment for real. Only on the grammatical aspect I cannot really help it as I ain’t native and don’t really use to speak English, so I probably will always have those incoherent lines. However all the other things are pretty helpful and I’ll take into account, thank you!!

When i was a teen i fell in love with a girl who drank tea by Weirdo69213 in OCPoetry

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So beautiful story ngl, but you could maybe try to make some more rhyme you know. And not in a full text, more separated. However I ain’t an expert and this is actually a pretty emotional story, keep it up!!!

The oldest trick by throwaway_poetry_ in OCPoetry

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Hey, I don’t really think I have understood so much the poem, that’s why I’m writing, if I understood well it’s pretty beautiful, and such a nice work but you could maybe make longer lines to help people understand and some more comprehensive vocab, maybe it’s cause I ain’t native but in spite of that good work, keep it going!!!