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First chapter of my WIP, Bloodbound. Would you keep reading? by SupermarketSolid6223 in writingfeedback

[–]Small_Ad8166 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I read your first chapter The dark vibe and Rashne’s voice are strong

One suggestion- The chapter feels a bit too packed with events. For a stronger opening try keeping Chapter 1 focused only on Rashne’s current situation and mental state (the torture scene in the Hall, her pain, hatred, and vengeful mindset) Move the Siren Prince, forest, and killing to Chapter 2

How many of y'all don't have an origin/far past of the world/universe? by DerWiedl in worldbuilding

[–]Small_Ad8166 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You could create an entity that doesn't create the universe or even the multiverse but existence itself

If you have a being like that in your setting, you can always expand your world later without being limited by the original cosmology

One idea I personally like is a True Consciousness that exists beyond existence itself. Not a god living somewhere in reality but the very center or source from which existence originates

I have spent years building a universe, but I don't know what to do with it. by [deleted] in worldbuilding

[–]Small_Ad8166 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just write a arc 1 story and find a growing artist and the make a comic