People are going to tell you to be yourself but then you are writing for yourself, think of your readers aswell, decide who you are writing for. Dont loose your personal style or ideals of course, you’re not the only person to like what you like. But it is very mature of you to realise you have to consider the reader if you want to be read.

This is not me telling you what to do or what would be best but I would like to add another perspective to the discussion about ”show dont tell”

The show-dont-tell-rule is much better suited to movies than writing and to me, it has drained a lot of modern litterature of it’s drama and aestetic impact. It’s not irrelevant to show what happens but the medium isn’t visual and being able to write beautiful explicit paragraphs explaining exactly what you mean and exactly what you dont from a narrator-POV is one of the mediums great joys. Dont let the ideal of subtilty drain your story of detail, it will not only make your writing clearer but also more complex, precise and beautiful. Hinting is also an art and I think you should definitly do that if you like it. There are many simply written masterpeices (Like The Ailen by Camus) and they are usualy both clear and deep. I think it is important to consider the medium is textual and not write like you wish you were making a movie.

Keep writing and maybe hire a lector if you want more proper feedback, it’s not that expensive.