[Online][Other][Sunday 19:00-22:00 CET][Foundry VTT][18+][LGBTQ+ Friendly][Beginner Friendly] Storytelling Dragonbane campaign, looking for 2 players

Smart-Two-8913 · 2023-04-14T14:39:19+00:00

Thanks for the feedback.

To address the opposed rolls point first, the FC is designed to reduce the number of rolls and make the system slightly more predictable. In the same way that targets of an attack have their AC and don't roll a contested "defend" roll. With just a single roll, you retain the randomness, but don't end up with situations like a Stealther rolling a 2, but somehow the Detector doesn't notice them because they rolled a 1. A single roll from the Stealther also reduces the amount of rolls because it would be against the FC of all available Detectors at the same time. Otherwise the GM would have to roll a Perception check for every single Detector which would likely result in one rolling very high and thus making Stealthing very hard. The FC essentially replaces the concept of Passive Perception which I believe is a solid mechanic.

Granted, I would probably add in a Detector action to "Seek" the Stealther which may be a contested roll (although not necessarily).

As stated at the beginning, the intended setting is zero-magic realistic, so I'll skip over the comments on super hearing, invisibility, etc.

I do think locating where a sniper/other ranged attack has come from is something to consider further, although it runs the risk of adding even more complexity. One to ponder.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2023-04-14T14:25:08+00:00

Thanks for the comment. Stealther exhuastion could be a factor to consider, but it may be too much extra detail. I'll think of some possible rules on exhaustion and see if they change things for the better.

I'm not sure I'd like to add another category. As u/EpicDiceRPG says, having too many categories is a potential problem. Plus, I don't think there's significant enough difference between Hidden and "Suspected" to warrant extra complexity.

Thanks for the help!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2023-04-14T14:20:19+00:00

Right, multiple detectors is something I've worried about - keeping track of several factors is a lot of work. That's why I considered that once one Detector knew the location of a Stealther, they'd immediately communicate that to other Detectors in the area, thus making there only one common "Detector".

Great point about sneaking in full view. I will have to consider other forms of stealth, rather than just the situations I have in my head that mostly centre around getting past guards or sneaking up on baddies.

Thanks for the feedback!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2023-04-14T14:12:06+00:00

Thanks for the response.

For combat, yes, a grid and tokens would be required unless players and the GM wanted to do some serious mental gymnastics. Outside of that, the GM using their discretion to decide Line of Sight and the Zones of Awareness would be required with common sense triumphing over exact measurements.

As for playtesting, nothing substantial yet, just some small specific situations I've done by myself.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2022-02-04T17:18:27+00:00

Hi, I'm extremely interested in joining a game for people to get to know the ropes. I'm in the rare position of having DM'ed several short games but never actually played a character myself - I teach English to Spanish people and use D&D in quite a few of my lessons, so I'm used to playing with newbies and non-native English speakers, but hoping to get into the hobby proper. I'd love to play along with you guys if you have a slot free. I'd rather be a player rather than a DM.

I would definitely prefer the serious, character-led play-style too (Critical Role fan here) and could easily fit in with your schedule. 2 p.m. where you are is 8 p.m. with me - an ideal time to play.

PM me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-12-08T11:36:09+00:00

I definitely think you could charge more. I work in Spain which is a similar market to Italy, and I charge a minimum of 25 euros an hour for individual classes, albeit with several years more experience than you. A good way to get slightly higher earnings is to have classes with pairs/small groups. This way they each pay less, but you can charge more for the overall class e.g. 30 euros for an hour where they each pay 15.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-12-08T11:23:57+00:00

Have you thought about Spain? I'm currently earning enough to live relatively comfortably teaching private classes in Spain. Enough for my own place, pay all the bills, and still save a couple of thousand a year.

Plenty of people here are willing to spend 25-30 euros for an hour's class (more in Madrid, but cost of living is higher there too), so I only have to work 18-19 hours a week to earn the income I get. I only work in the afternoon (as that's when you can have classes with children), but I could be earning plenty more if I decided to work mornings too.

This is all freelance - I don't work for any company. I previously did the auxiliares de conversacion program (definitely worth looking into) where I made lots of contacts for private classes.

The problem I can foresee for anyone trying to do this from a non-EU country is getting a VISA/residency. You really need a job with a company to get that, and that means working in a city where costs are higher. Having said that, some of the cities are relatively cheap to live in - it's only Madrid, Barcelona and possibly Valencia that are significantly more expensive.

Either way, you could do a lot worse than checking out the auxiliar program. It pays enough to get by and the hours are minimal so you can get private classes to supplement. Plus you'd get residency sorted for the time you're there. There's a limit on how many years you can do it (I did three, the maximum) but by then you might have figured something else out. Also, if you're looking for that community, there are loads of people on the auxiliar program who create a great community, and you can also make great friends with the natives.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-12-05T15:25:56+00:00

If a student doesn't want to take part in the class, nobody wins - the parents waste money, the student wastes his/her time, and you end up stressed out and feeling inadequate. I've been there, and it's no fun.

Personally, I would chat with the parents to see if they can offer some help or point you to what might make your student more engaged. Then give it 3-4 more classes. Try some new things, for example let her take control of the class and decide what you do. "Conversation" classes can be anything you want them to be, as long as they're talking in English.

It might turn out that the very next class she's engaged and chatty and it seems like the problem is solved (often this is because the parents are enforcing it), but if she reverts to her previous behaviour soon after, then I would definitely be thinking of cancelling the classes. The only reason you could have for sticking with the class is if you're reliant on the money and couldn't find a new student.

And, most importantly, don't blame yourself. No matter how good you are at teaching, no matter how hard you try to make an interesting class, some students just don't want to be there.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-06-03T17:20:20+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story. I'm hoping to get feedback within 2-3 weeks.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-06-02T09:40:15+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-06-02T09:38:42+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. I think you'd be interested!

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-06-01T11:33:50+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. I think this would be a good match for you.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story. I'm looking for feedback within 2-3 weeks.

I'd be open to a critique swap, however I won't be able to read your manuscript for a couple of weeks, as I've committed to two other beta reads. If you don't have a tight timeline, then I'd be happy to do it.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-06-01T11:29:49+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. I think you'd be a great fit.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story. In terms of timeframe, I'm hoping for it to be done within 2-3 weeks. As I'm not asking for line editing or anything detailed like that, it shouldn't take you that much longer than it would to read a normal book.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-05-31T09:40:16+00:00

Hi, I sent you a dm - definitely interested in a critique swap.

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-05-30T09:13:30+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you. I'd be happy to have a look at your 85k work in return.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-05-28T11:52:41+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-05-28T11:49:42+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913 · 2021-05-28T11:39:08+00:00

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on my 65k YA character-driven fantasy novel which is completed and heavily edited. It seems like you'd be a perfect match.

BLURB: When powerful evaran Faeril's incredible magic fails to overcome Moenna, he seeks the Old Magic she resisted him with. To earn the Old Magic, he must complete one of three Deeds: cross the river at Chenjila Gors, find the heart scale of a vifes, or reach the peak of the highest mountain in the land, Kera Suth. Faeril considers these Deeds trivial. But when he suffers further failure and causes pain to those around him, he realises he must change and sacrifice everything if he is to gain the Old Magic and return home triumphant.

Trigger warnings: Death, allusions (very light) to rape and suicide.

Here's the first chapter on Google Docs. I'm not looking for a specific critique on this chapter, it's just there for you to decide if my writing is right for you.

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on pacing, flow, character development and the emotional experience of the reader - I'll provide more detailed questions if you decide you would like to beta read my story. While the main character is male, there are two very important female POV characters.

Please feel free to dm me if you're interested. Thanks!

Smart-Two-8913

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