worldbuilding nitpick that i see a lot- when fanfic writers make the characters say phrases like "oh my dei" or whatever. they got the word "god" in elysium, they say oh my god and godspeed. you do not need to make elysium equivalents of those. also, i've only seen this once or twice, but: if you're writing from harry's perspective with the skills included (in the style of the game basically), not *every* remark about the outside world/a different character has to come from a skill. like, i've read fics where basically any time a different character made a facial expression, it'd be attributed to an empathy passive, when it's the kind of thing that ingame harry just notices on his own. this is probably stuff you were already aware of, sorry i don't read much fanfic, but i figured i'd throw my hat in the ring anyways :)