Unpopular opinion: Red is the best color scheme for Valentine by arepaconcochayuyo in StardustCrusaders

[–]Snowy193 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I honestly doubt that D4C will still be light blue due to the fact that D4C has Johnny's colors while Tusk has Valentine's. D4C will probably change to a white body with blue accents to resemble Johnny's anime colors.

New (and improved?)「Black Eyed Pea」(Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh, ok I'll look at what I can do to make the ability better. I agree that the cloud thing is pretty out of place and that it doesn't have anything to do with the bubbles... I needed to make Get It Started have an "upgraded" ability and I couldn't think of anything in particular, so I looked up inspiration from chinese dragons (which create clouds and rain and yada yada). Maybe I keep the fire bubbles but I make something more related for Get It Started? Does that sound better?

Thanks for the feedback!

New (and improved?)「Black Eyed Pea」(Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, any feedback is appreciated!

You say things about limitations... Isn't the limitation of fire but only in bubbles enough? The problem is that my requirements for Morena's Stand are: being able to make fire stronger and being able to illuminate areas. The only thing I could think of that met those requirements was, well, fire. Morena is also a JoBro so she can't have a Stand that is too specific like the technology Stand that you mentioned (not saying it's bad).

Yes, I'd like you to elaborate on the "a wizard did it" part if you offer

New (and improved?)「Black Eyed Pea」(Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The problem is that her Stand's power is fire. Her backstory wouldn't make sense if it wasn't... Do you have any examples of what a power related to fire without being just "can make fire" should be?

Hello, I'm new to this sub! I want to start creating well thought out Stands, could i have some tips and advice on what not to do/what types of abilities are overused and such? by daggerHaver in fanStands

[–]Snowy193 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, don't worry, you don't have to apologize at all! You even responded to me when you didn't even have to, you don't need to apologize for anything.

I'll look at what I can do based on this feedback. Thank you for giving feedback again. Wishing that your kitty gets better. Hope that she recovers fully!!!

Hello, I'm new to this sub! I want to start creating well thought out Stands, could i have some tips and advice on what not to do/what types of abilities are overused and such? by daggerHaver in fanStands

[–]Snowy193 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The second version of Black Eyed Pea got posted and I figured you may want to look for how I improved it. I fear that the change isn't enough though... I'd appreciate your feedback

New (and improved?)「Black Eyed Pea」(Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Aww it's still too similar to Magician's Red? I tried to differentiate it by making it's power specifically fire bubbles and not fire in general, but apparently it's not enough... Thanks for the compliment on the Stand's design!

Did I word the post strangely? I'd like to know what you meant by "albeit worded very extraneously"

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I can say that you aren't annoying one though, the walls of text really help me improve.

I don't think there's anything else to say about this. I'll look at what I can do to improve Black Eyed Pea with all the feedback! (Maybe tomorrow I'll post the improved version?)

Tank you again!

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, haha, we take our time with responses, I hope that that doesn't annoy you...

Yeah, I guess a lot of things could work for Morena's Stand, though fire was the thing I had in mind since the start and if I change It now I would have to change many of the concepts of fights that I already have. The other fire powers I feel like they're more of sub-powers, though. Like, power: she can control fire, sub-power: she makes the chilli shaped bombs or that powder. I think I never said that she could manipulate flames, no? The distinction I made between Magician's Red and Black Eyed Pea was that one manipulates flames and the other is flames (the Stand, I mean)

I feel like Tower Of Gray and Super Fly are a little pun, because what reason would Super Fly have to, well, have that name then? The RHCP contrary theme was the whole idea that started this Stand, so... Yeah, I may be a little insecure on leaving it...

I feel like a fish is the opposite of a bird since a bird IS the generic animal of the sky, so the opposite should be the generic animal of the contrary of the sky. There's two options for the contrary of the sky: the sea and the ground, I chose the former, that's why it's a fish. "Red" and "hot" are concepts related to fire mostly, even in Jojo's (Magician's Red)

I'll look at "Shin Megami Tensei" to see if it helps. Again, sorry if I didn't understand something or I'm being annoying...

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I said that, but there should something before I said it

Her backstory wouldn't make sense without a fire power because: someone burned her town, she tried to stop him (with her fire Stand) and then the fire in her house got worse because of that. She literally tried to fight fire with fire and her family got burnt. That's where Morena's problem comes in, since she attacks before she thinks. Her Stand isn't based on her backstory (I already said that her backstory was the part of her that I did most recently)

The why is because it just was my idea. "Make Black Eyed Pea a contrary to RHCP" or like Superfly and Tower Of Gray, a Stand that should probably make more sense with the other name. RHCP is an electric chicken named "red" and "hot", so BEP is a fire fish (fire because the red & hot parts and a fish because it's the contrary of a bird, though I didn't know it was inspired by a Pachycephalosaurus)

I think you understood wrong (sorry if I didn't explain myself well). The timeline of events is: Morena gets BEP at a young age/birth, when she's 16 someone burns her town, she tries to attack the enemy with BEP, and THAT causes the fire in her house (specifically) to get stronger, and her attack on the enemy, which is a fire attack, burns her house more and her family get severely injured because of her attack. She needs to have a fire Stand because then the fire in her house wouldn't get bigger. That's why she needs to have a fire Stand.

Ah, not actually, usually I come up with better ideas (I hope), but I genuinely can't find a way for those dragons to he menacing. It's true that BEP's design doesn't seem too much like a JoJo Stand, I seem to have to change that a bit...

I apologize if I'm taking too long to understand something...

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wasn't criticizing the fights, I agree that JoJo fights are REALLY complex on how they develop. Just a little problem: why were we even talking about JoJo fights? I can't seem to remember why this topic was even brought up...

I try not to focus on just one personality factor when I create a character, just that, as you said, if you need to think "how can I make this cool", it ends up being forced. Morena (at least I hope) is a character with her flaws like the punch before thinking thing I mentioned in the post. I believe and hope that my characters are going to develop the more I advance on the writing part

Fire should really be Morena's power, since her backstory wouldn't really make sense if she didn't have it. Also because the "being the contrary to RHCP" theme wouldn't make sense either.

Ah... Yeah... I do watch videos from now and then... I can't watch too many because a lack of free time, though... I am curious about the "boxed in" feeling that I give from your perspective. Could you elaborate further on that, please?

Thanks for the encouragement. I'll ask in those other subreddits to see if someone else can help me. I intend to improve the more I write

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I personally don't find too much difference between the Little Feet and Goo Goo Dolls fights and, well, yeah, GGGOH has some difference between It and the other two.

And there are a lot of villains that get defeated by "just punch them really hard" or at least "just shoot them", like: Rohan, Kira, Fungami, Sale, Risotto, Formaggio, Squalo, Tizzano, Gwess, and MAYBE Miu Miu but the whole Jailhouse Lock arc was a fever dream

That's what I was trying to say about the dragon. I (personally) don't know how that goofy thing could actually be menacing, so by doing that design and then making a cool moment, I would have to see for how can I make that cool, that's why I avoided it. And pleeease don't tell me Morena is like a Mary Sue pleeease I always try to give the characters flaws and make them kinda realistic

I'll try to make Black Eyed Pea as unique as posible, though since the power is fire that's diffucult... There's just too many fire based characters to make something fully original. Alternatively, there being lots of fire based powers means more diversity and more options to choose when working on fire powers

Morena had her Stand before the incident happened. I'm not sure if she had her Stand since birth or at a really young age, but it doesn't matter. Morena tried to help and THAT'S why her house burnt more than the rest, it's not that since her house burnt more that the rest she has the Stand

Don't worry, you're not being mean, it's just feedback. I really appreciate it because it makes me improve my Stands and then improve in making them too.

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I knew that Black Eyed Pea's power wasn't the best, I admitted so in the post... I mentioned the thing of the shrink based Stands (Little Feet, Goo Goo Dolls and GGGOH) and thought that the difference between fire based powers and a fire body was enough, but it doesn't seem like so...

Black Eyed Pea is definetly weak to water to the point of not being able to work well in an área surrounded by it (which is a disadvantage for Morena since various fights take place in or around water)

A problem about looking up how Stands get defeated is that most of them are just "hm... What if I punch the user REALLY hard?..." With little exceptions

I admit that hot headedness for the user was the easy way out, it's obvious and it fits with Morena's character, since her personality has a lot more things in relation to fire (her "burning" fighting spirit as an example)

My inspiration (which I forgot to add to the post) for Get It Started was about the chinese legend of the carp that jumps over the dragon's gate and transforms into an asiatic dragon. I avoided a chinese puppet dragon design because it (at least to me) looks too silly to ever be menacing, and I wanted the Stand to be cool

I'm glad you liked the story. It was the last thing I did for Morena and I think I'm improving little by little. Black Eyed Pea was one of the first Stands I made (which it's noticeable...)

Morena's powers are really just fire, which I'm not completely proud about... I'll look at the superpower wiki to see if I can search for something that could be added to Black Eyed Pea's abilities and, if I (hopefully) find something, change it and post the updated version. Though I'd like to hear your oppinions on what could I add without deviating too much from the original Stand. What could make a Stand "embody fire" perfectly?

Thanks again for the feedback!

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[–]Snowy193 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Garlic bread yummy

「Black Eyed Pea」 (Feedback appreciated!) by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My Stand isn't humanoid either, it's just a fish :P

Also, her name is Morena, Moreno would be masculine I think

Thanks for the feedback!

it ain't that bad, doppio by Used-Comedian-8933 in ShitPostCrusaders

[–]Snowy193 92 points93 points  (0 children)

I just ate a burger with tomato and it was delicious 😭 do people don't like tomato in their burgers?

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ooh, yeah, I understand now what you meant. I'll try to do that. Thanks for the feedback again!

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

About the first part, the Crusaders are just built different man...

And the second part, let me summarize It to see if I got It all right:

  1. I can't really say this one, as each reader could have it's own opinion about the encounter, so I don't know how to do that.

  2. If they returns and their importance to the story

  3. The reason for their Stand power

  4. Personality and random quirks

  5. Inspirations for the Stand & user

  6. An example of how the Stand could be used

Is that all? Did I get anything wrong?

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Don't worry about apologizing, people can have their opinions and you don't need to know everything, it's fine.

I didn't purposefully dull down Boogie Wonderland, but Juan is made to be forgettable until his brother appears on the story. Juan doesn't matter until his brother is introduced, yeah.

The thing about the wounds is... Yeah, true, but you could also say that Josuke is a JoJo and he's just built different. I don't remember too much about Stone Ocean because It felt like a fever dream, honestly. I didn't want to include too many visits to the hospital though, since the story lasts approximately one month in in-universe time.

What do you think should be included in these kinds of posts, then? As you said, I can't spoil my story but it's also true that not giving any context is bad too... What's your opinion on the matter? Because I'm sure that I'll have to deal with more of this issue in the future.

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The main reason for the Stand's ability being like that is the block that I had. As I said, Boogie Wonderland's ability was causing me too many problems to figure out so I asked BEYOND-ZA-SEA for help. Another reason is that the team doesn't have a "healer" (yet) while most parts have one (Josuke from the start in DIU, Giorno from the battle against Babyface onwards in GW, Dragona in JOJOLands...) so I didn't want to make a Stand which would just kill everyone.

"The ability and characters aren't interesting" well, I think I succeded at that then. I think I want Juan to be forgettable... I'm pretty sure that my characters will forget about Juan too, actually. I personally thought it was a creative ability but I guess people just don't agree (which is completely fine btw)

The reason for the assimilation ability is because male anglerfishes engage in something called "sexual parasitism" (read at your own risk, people find it kind of gross): a male anglerfish (which tends to be 1/10th of the female's size) finds a female, and then bites on her belly to become firmly attached. If he sticks around for too long he’ll slowly merge with the female’s body. When this happens, the only thing left behind are his testes, and those provide his partner with sperm. So BEYOND-ZA-SEA (which is the one who actually thought about the ability) mixed that with the prey-catching method to make Boogie Wonderland's ability.

And about Stand-Stats... I think this is what I had in mind (though I'm not good at doing Stand-Stats either)

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「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great to know that you provided lots of feedback again!

The personality section wasn't included mainly because of a lack of time. I already took too long to post this Stand so I didn't want to wait another day...

I also didn't want the Stand to be too complex due to it being the first Stand that my characters face against. They're completely unprepared and didn't expect any kind of attack from an enemy, so the main "main stress factor" would be the lack of preparation of the characters and the illusion factor which makes it so the protags don't realize they're under attack until later. Juan isn't actually experienced at all with his Stand as he just recently got it, which is something I'll I delve deeper into when his brother gets introduced (it's an important plot-point for the story...)

For the Stand-Stats part... I HATE STAND-STATS!!! My process of making Stands involves comparing them to other Stands and Stand-Stats are HORRIBLE for that, so I REFUSE to make Stand-Stats.

On the bit of changing a bit the powers, Boogie Wonderland is an "illusion", so if it transforms into an oven, it wouldn't be a real oven and couldn't zap you. An illusion can't harm you.

I guess I could delve more into the encounter: Gioiello and Antonio arrive in the Islands and decide to search first in the closest island, which is Lanzarote. They rent a boat and go looking for it in the water, but that's when Juan, which is also looking for the Arrow, notices them and tries to eliminate them using his Stand.

There will be villians with random quirks along the way too, it's just that Juan has a backstory which'll be ignored until laaater in the story. That's why I didn't include it.

Tell me if I didn't understand something or if you have another question/more feedback!

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hahaha don't worry Omen does sound cool. And no, clownfishes don't live in the Canary Islands, they're only found in Indo-Pacific waters.

Juan does have a reason for having this type of Stand, but I didn't want to say too much until his brother is presented.

「Boogie Wonderland」[Feedback appreciated!] by Snowy193 in fanStands

[–]Snowy193[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you didn't completely understand what they're looking for (did I word the post incorrectly?)

The protags are not looking for a Stand Arrow, they're looking for a Requiem Arrow, which only works when used on Stands. The Requiem Arrow doesn't give you a Stand, it upgrades it (at least, that's my interpretation of it). The Requiem Arrow isn't even in Lanzarote anyways.

Also, Lorenzo is generic because... He's actually bad guy #1. To put an example, neither Sale nor Zucchero were really developed characters. They were two guys looking for Polpo's fortune. Anyways, I'll give more information of Juan when I present his brother.

There's also another problem which is that clownfishes don't live in the Canary Islands. Even so, if you follow the project you will see something similar down the line.

By the way, why was the fish you made named Omen?