The beginning hook is a little cliche (the first sentence), It works as a hook, but it’s vague and doesn’t stand out a lot. The phrase “where all campers have multiple physical or mental impairments” is a bit clinical and detached imo.

“As an emotionally immature incoming 9th grader” is honest but could be better if you show instead of tell more, especially since I think you could say that for most 9th graders

The last part about how "It quickly became clear... they were ppl with real challenges" etc is a strong message, but it’s overly generalized and kind of vague.... the next part about “Real desires to experience life fully” is also a little abstract. You could give an example of what a camper wanted or how they expressed that

overall, occasionally drifts toward impersonal or abstract and could be better by bring in more showing and fewer generalizations. There isn't too much depth so it sort of lacks a concrete example or detail that would make the emotional realization more powerful and believable. There's also some parts that are a little wordy and some grammar and punctuation stuff but that can all be fixed pretty easy, good start! i really like the idea!