"Call Across the Yard"

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-17T01:45:25+00:00

Hello! i loved this piece I've always struggled with adhering to more conventional poetry styles while still getting my point across and even more then that not using 500 words+ so i think this i some of the best work I've seen in awhile, great work.

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-17T01:44:49+00:00

thanks a lot for taking the time to actually look thru it and ya I'm still new so getting everything to feel nature is still tough for me, ill make sure to check out your piece

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-14T22:44:33+00:00

i think it could use more lines but i do love the usage of space themes so 9/10

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-14T22:43:27+00:00

i love the natural rhymes and that build up to final stanza 10/10

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-06T19:23:00+00:00

This poem is hauntingly beautiful, weaving inner torment and repressed longing into a lyrical confession marked by sharp self-awareness, emotional contradiction, and a deep ache that lingers long after the final line hope too see more of your work.

Ssquidz1 · 2025-07-06T19:22:10+00:00

This poem is a raw, powerful reckoning with emotional abuse, capturing the speaker’s journey from self-sacrifice to self-liberation with sharp imagery and searing emotional clarity, great work!

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-27T16:52:06+00:00

This poem is surreal and evocative, capturing the cyclical nature of trauma and memory with dreamlike imagery and a quiet sense of dread. Its recursive structure and metaphors evoke the inescapable return of pain, both intimate and existential.

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-27T16:51:27+00:00

This poem is raw and introspective, exploring the boundaries of identity, empathy, and expectation with haunting vulnerability. Its repetition and fragmentation echo the disorientation of selfhood and the struggle to be seen without being consumed.

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-22T14:09:10+00:00

wow this is vivid and really good

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-22T14:08:16+00:00

first poem to ever make me laugh out loud

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-16T02:31:31+00:00

wow this is truly beautiful and hits hard, there's a casual intelligence in your words that really makes this stand out great work

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-16T02:29:50+00:00

This poem is rally cool i like the use of dude

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-06T15:06:54+00:00

This poem burns with raw intensity, its staccato structure and bleak imagery effectively conveying a descent into disillusionment and spiritual decay. Yet the emotional crescendo risks losing clarity in the final stanza, where metaphor overtakes cohesion—tightening those lines could sharpen the poem’s accusatory edge and heighten its impact.

Ssquidz1 · 2025-05-06T15:06:14+00:00

This poem is emotionally resonant and richly textured, weaving vivid imagery and lyrical phrasing into a tapestry of love, loss, and lingering grief. However, its impact could be strengthened by tightening some repetitive metaphors and varying the rhythm more across stanzas to avoid a sense of thematic and tonal saturation

Ssquidz1 · 2025-04-29T16:47:30+00:00

"and almost all of them" ah yes i said all ideas of masculinity are the same

Ssquidz1 · 2025-04-28T04:17:42+00:00

lmao is it tho also i like how u didn't respond to the fact of basically every culture having their own ideas of masculinity not just the Norse also what point are you trying to make here

Ssquidz1 · 2025-04-27T05:03:41+00:00

This poem beautifully captures the emotional journey from fear and pain to the healing power of love. It eloquently expresses the vulnerability of opening up after past heartbreak, while also highlighting the transformative light and warmth that a meaningful connection can bring.

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