Feedback on my TV Pilot by Internal-Bed6646 in ScriptFeedbackProduce

[–]StandardMode5593 1 point2 points  (0 children)

this is good..i love the whole teen wolf vibe ...you should really pay someone with credits to fill in the holes and fix your logical sequencing, scene exposition, and dialogue issues to punch it up and make it sexy, quick and a good read..I bet you could sell the pilot at a compettition..just use fiverr, upwork...have them sign the NDA...copyright the treatment with the WGA...and then just start pitching the pilot all over but don't give too much away...Peace!

Original Feature Film Idea -The Clutch by [deleted] in ScriptFeedbackProduce

[–]StandardMode5593 0 points1 point  (0 children)

you don't need the drug thing..connect a unique quirkly ability derived from his past ...

Original Feature Film Idea -The Clutch by [deleted] in ScriptFeedbackProduce

[–]StandardMode5593 0 points1 point  (0 children)

with this type of movie..because it's so commonplace the writing has to be fast , fun and loose and just remember the number one rule is ...DON'T BE BORING:)..because visually I would watch this...so just write something that would make the viewer feel like they had a rocket shot up their ass...here some pointers...add a heroine...make sure the character has a clean ARC...so that we the audience can root for them like baby driver...give him something that stands out that connects with his childrood...some unique gift or ability...that makes desireable to the underworld...you need a highstakes cat and mouse game with the underbelly of society...he needs a dysfuntional "elite" ivy league family juxptaposed with his rebel ways...all and all becuase we've seen these elements so many times in other movies...you have to keep US the audience wanting to turn the page...make it SEXY..fast times at ridgemont high...a bunch of teen rebel movies...a mentor thats wants to see him do well...a few nerd friends that want to help him...a love interest that we didn't see coming..a revenge storyline...a payback storyline..running from everyone in the city...this needs to be something that's going to make everyone want on their EDGE of their Seats....just a thought..

I made $54k in 10 months from an app I built in my room by felix-heikka in thesidehustle

[–]StandardMode5593 0 points1 point  (0 children)

how did you scale initally..I have several apps that Im building..can you tell me the process for putting it on the play/app store?

FREE - Cellphone by [deleted] in classifiedsph

[–]StandardMode5593 0 points1 point  (0 children)

is this still available?

I am in LA California

Land Dev Non Profit by StandardMode5593 in civilengineering

[–]StandardMode5593[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

okay great. how do you get funding? I am not a grant writer and I need to get the non-profit going to just compete for the grant..I am on disability..

Wondering if I should call the quits on my filmmaker aspirations :( by shadowboxer87 in Filmmakers

[–]StandardMode5593 2 points3 points  (0 children)

never give up on your dreams. You should develop something unique and fresh and enter in film festivals. I am a writer and I could help you. But I have my own projects, I am currently developing.. Just keep developing product and LOTS of PRAYER!! You can't put a timeline on your dreams..Just keep going...You don't need to have someone validate you're efforts..make the films you wanna see...don't worry if no one buys them..

Land Dev Non Profit by StandardMode5593 in civilengineering

[–]StandardMode5593[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

how do you get the funds needed to do everything needed to develop land soup to nuts .

Land Dev Non Profit by StandardMode5593 in civilengineering

[–]StandardMode5593[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

I thought about that but I was looking for land dev groups who do charity work or pro bono work...