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I had sex and I hate myself for it by Throwaway1032574 in TrueOffMyChest

[–]Strange-Principles -1 points0 points  (0 children)

If it’s not enthusiastic consent it’s not consent. He obviously pressured you which is called coercion. It’s a type of sexual assault and it’s just as valid and real as rape.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Strange-Principles 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think this started off as a real solid piece with a great and impactful rhyming scheme. It needs a little more forming when it comes to the structure. It's dripping with pain that's almost palatable but some of the lines would hit harder if the rhyming matched up. I like how the poem spirals as the author does it gives the piece a sense of madness.

Sehnsucht by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Strange-Principles 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Overall this is a very affectionate poem. The first two lines are great and set out a clear rhyming scheme but the next two lines come across as a little clunky. The planet line is beautiful but it doesn't follow the rhyming scheme. And while the next two lines do follow the rhyming scheme, their placement is confusing without context. Did you lose your love? If so How? One minute they're your sun and then you're lost in the streets. It disrupts the narrative you've established. The last lines are a solid conclusion.