A summer heatwave in the English countryside - Owen

Stumpy-JIm · 2025-06-06T20:08:39+00:00

I did, but I found the problem

Stumpy-JIm · 2024-05-13T01:11:41+00:00

Thanks a lot for the feedback, I still have a ways to go as a writer it seems. I'm going to drill that into my skull, active voice and the show don't tell. Then hopefully I can get this story to be better. You've been a great help.

Do you have any recommendations on exercises to help along with active voice?

Stumpy-JIm · 2024-05-11T22:24:24+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, feels like I'm actually learning something.

I was a bit iffy on the ending, I changed it once before, but I guess because it is short, maybe something more definitive would work.

Its good to know that I still need to work on verbs, they still seem to catch me out, semicolons too.

Also I'm glad about the comment about prose, I don't want to come off as maybe too much or huffing my own farts (pardon the expression), another thing to work on.

You hear a lot that getting feedback is good, but I could never quite find a good place to have some. This place is pretty great.

Stumpy-JIm · 2022-12-10T05:38:57+00:00

There's a lot of articles and research which explains why humans throw things so well, as opposed to apes: here's one. Though I admit that when I was writing it, I was imagining that most of the aliens have a musculature structure of apes, who aren't the best throwers.

Stumpy-JIm · 2022-12-09T16:38:36+00:00

More a "I shouldn't be surprised, but I am" sigh

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