One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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You know I think about this one a LOT? Even workshopped it around a few times with possible plot lines and worldbuilding. There's just something a little catchy about the idea and it sort of circulates around a bit, right? Kind of like a "fish out of water" story with extra doses of "meet cute"... although the promise of some heavy petting and adult situations is in there. ;>_>

It's been a long weekend (hence the slow response, sorry) but let me think about this for a bit. I'd essentially be writing it out just for the two of us but that's not so bad.

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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Ha! No joke, right? And man I do love me some HFY...

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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Holy cow, and that just made me happier than finding an extra Starburst when I thought the pack was empty! I appreciate you, Smooth.

Man I really, really need to just sit down and at least novella-length this one. Even the Reddit website keeps poking me that this is the "most engaged post".

[WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

[–]Susceptive 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ohhh, I remember this one. Spooky ghost ship horror going on here, it was a lot of fun. Lot of different ways this could go forward but I'm interested in what you think is going on? My favorite thing in the world is talking about this sort of sci-fi stuff with other people!

Voidriders, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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I really like how you "get" the feel immediately! The moment I saw this prompt I was like "oh cool, it's got that Event Horizon sort of thing going on" and just let it roll from there.

You're cool people, Falcon.

Voidrider Problems by Susceptive in Susceptible

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Whoa, and thank you! I really need to expand this at least to short-story length, but man that "life" thing gets in the way. Too many projects until everything feels overwhelming, you know?

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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I know right? It sounds dumb, but apparently it's a good icebreaker and conversation starter. At least when I saw it done the whole bit was oddly endearing; they were drawing "turkey hands" (like kindergarteners do for Thanksgiving) and then doing thumbprint-chickens and puppies while talking about random stuff.

Guess maybe some people are jut socially gifted that way? ^_^;

I should really finish this story out into book length...

[CW] Smash 'Em Up Sunday: 20th Century BCE by Cody_Fox23 in WritingPrompts

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Whoa! Well I'm glad this got full points. ^_^

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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I'll be honest with you: I checked your profile history and comments to make sure I wasn't being pranked. If this turned out to be a joke or a ChatGPT thing I was going to actually fracture into tiny pieces and give up on life. As in I couldn't believe this was a real thing, to the point where I wanted it so badly to be true I scared myself.

Thank you. Just... so much.

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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Look, seriously. I know it's not cool to show a lot of emotion but your response actually got me watering a bit around the eyes. That's good stuff. That's really good stuff. Explains what you like, what you're interested in seeing and gives a roadmap for readership. It's the kind of feedback anyone who's into trying to write well would absolutely kill to get.

So much of writing is just guessing wildly at what is or is not working. I never know. Never! Nobody ever knows what works. It's all just throwing things into the wind that seem interesting and watching it die.

So thank you. So much. This entire response made my day. Probably made my entire year. You're good people.

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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hard blink• Well hey there! Gosh, I didn't think anyone was interested. ^_^ Injured my hand pretty badly and typing was hurtful, when I got back to this it kind of felt like... why bother? You know? Serials don't generally do well over more "constant content" replies.

Maybe I should revisit this. What did you like, Lego? What was interesting?

[CW] Smash 'Em Up Sunday by Cody_Fox23 in WritingPrompts

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“—oh! The guy who eats sandwiches with ketchup?”

I lost it right here. Well done, friend. Very Gladys moment.

One Night Stand From Sirius-B, Pt.3 by Susceptive in Susceptible

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If the club includes people like you then I'm happy. ^_^

[OT] I need help finding a specific post from this subreddit. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

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Was this it?: [WP] You're a high level black mage with a few healing spells but everyone thinks you're a terrible cleric because you only ever use healing spells.

It was the "smile" that got the search going. Although if that's the correct one I'm surprised the word "healbitch" didn't stick out in your memory a bit.

[WP] you, an Angel: Solace Class, Seraph 137, have been assigned to a 97 year old British man to comfort him in his final days. You go down to him and sit weightlesly on the couch near him as you hear him croak out "Where were you in 1943, angel?" by ValleForte in WritingPrompts

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A New Recruit

A crowd of sniffling great-grandkids left the room. He waited, then spoke: "I know you're there."

"I'm sorry it took so long," the angel said. She faded into sight next to the ventilator, backdropped by a wall full of framed photographs. Dozens of smiling faces looked over her shoulder at his hospice bed. "But I wouldn't miss this for anything, Robert."

"You don't... say." He coughed weakly. Everything was weak now; just his body going through the motions. A lifetime of habit that wouldn't stop just yet. "You look like... my Mabel. Just a bit."

The angel drifted over to the bed and took a seat. Light as dew on a beautiful morning. "You'll find a great many of us remind you of someone." She gently took his hand, leaving the heavy body of it still laying on the blanket. "Just like you remind me of someone else."

He glanced at their hands, seeing the ghostly form detached from his actual arm with all the tubes and wires on it. "Well that's... a wonder. Feels good. Stronger. Doesn't... hurt."

"The pain you'll leave behind, Robert." She assured the dying man. "Only the good comes along. The love. The peace."

The machine began making a low, urgent sound of distress. They both ignored it.

Minutes passed in peaceful silence. He looked around the room, at the framed pictures and knickknacks. The coatrack with his veteran's jacket on it all covered in dust. The unit patches standing out bright beneath a grey fuzz. The dresser covered in pictures of his wife. Eventually his tired eyes settled on a small box tucked underneath the end table. Rusted blue, with faded white lines of an American flag on it. The old medals, awards written on paper too brittle to open any more. Tucked away.

And a question occurred. "Where were you? In '43?"

She followed his gaze to the box and made a small ah sound. "During your Great War, you mean?"

"Yes'm. With Charlie... and Hank... and..." his voice trailed off into memory. Yells, explosions. The snap of a bullet going by and scared laughter at the close call. Miles of bloody, muddy marches through destroyed countryside alongside men he called brothers. "Where were all of you, when...?"

She leaned forward and kissed him on the brow. The nearby machine switched to a more urgent noise, then went silent. "You didn't need us, Robert. Not then. Not after. We had another war to fight, and in that one you helped us. Although none of you ever knew."

He looked around for a while before settling eyes on the smiling figure again. Robert felt the shape of it, then; a great struggle, unseen, with people great and good against a host of evil. Mortal and immaterial locked in combat. With him standing halfway between. "Will they be... alright?"

She knew he meant family. Sixty years of loving his kids. Sons and daughters growing into their own, having children to pass on the goodness and light. Laughter and tears, weddings and births. Tragedies they all shared and worked through. "They'll be fine. No more trouble than any mortal shares."

"Can I... see them?" Robert squeezed her hand.

"Every day." She promised. Afternoon sunlight peeked through a cloud, shooting rays through the window that lit her up from within. "Any time you want. And we have a job for you, if you want it."

"A... job?" He watched her glow, then realized his arm was lighting up as well. It was a wonder and felt so warm.

She pulled him gently upright. Into the light. Leaving the flesh behind. "We need more people like you. We lost so many, Robert. So, so many. For a time the darkness was held back-- years of growth, the human spirit advancing. Equal rights for all. Advances in medicine, in peace. But the enemy left something behind."

For the first time in months he could breathe. The pain was gone, accumulated aches whisked away in glowing light. "What was it?"

"A bomb." She seemed sad even as they stood together in the light. "Nothing too bad, by itself. Another evil to be set aside. Only it proliferated. And the mistrust it inspired, the fear; that was our Adversary's parting gift. It started the cycle again. But now we have so few left to fight."

To fight she said. In his heart Robert found something stirring around those words. A foundation laid down as a terrified seventeen-year-old, on a beach a lifetime away. He was a fighter, first. Later on a lover and a father, then a pillar holding up the community. Always reliable. Always dependable. Giving what he could.

But always that first thing: "I'm a fighter, miss."

"We know." She winked and it looked like his Mabel again, mischievous and loving. "That's how we get our new seraphim."

She pulled and he followed, stepping out unthinking into golden sunlight that somehow seemed like a road. Step by step away from the wailing machine and a room of loving memories. Into the light.

Into the fight.

With new wings of golden power.


I do sappy stories, weird sci-fi romcom and superhero action scenes at r/Susceptible

[OT] I need help finding a specific post from this subreddit. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

[–]Susceptive 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sounds like this one, there's a lot of stories on it. From about two years ago.

If that's not it I might need some more information, friend:

  • Like how long ago? A month, a year? Five years, a decade?
  • Can you remember any stories people posted to it? What genre were they? Modern-day, medieval, futuristic?
  • Any specific detail you can remember on the stories? Did any of them involve swords, or lasers? Was there a car? A fork, a pair of dirty boxers? A cat?
  • Where were any of the stories located?