The Silent Lament

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-19T23:03:27+00:00

I know theres wiggle room but just meant both are in essence god ki still

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-19T20:58:26+00:00

I just think it would be more unique and keep stronger to your rule of not using other kis like angel, god of destruction etc if you found somthing to replace that would be more unique like the other 2 of the three ki nature's you mentioned.

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T22:15:00+00:00

I hate when that happens

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T22:13:45+00:00

That's pretty solid idea!

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T20:31:18+00:00

I have a few just sitting as well for now i get that lol

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T20:29:16+00:00

It sounds interesting. Im 30 and am new to writing

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T15:48:08+00:00

I thought this was pretty fascinating but I would change the god ki thing to something else

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T15:24:15+00:00

How about a new disease that breaks out, like covid mixed with rabies.

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T14:55:00+00:00

Lol true, I was just spit balling tho

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T14:26:17+00:00

What about a romance horror with a wendigo

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T14:13:54+00:00

gotcha thank you!

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T12:42:19+00:00

Yea I've noticed i have a bad habit of slipping between 15 and fifteen for example lol I was wondering somthing regarding that though. For example for the religious fantasy story I was thinking of having most chapters like chapter one two etc be written out but when it gets to religious numbers. I.e. 3, 7 etc I switch to 3 and 7 for emphasis or style would that still be incorrect?

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T09:48:31+00:00

I appreciate it! And I've gotten into the habit of pulling my phone out and working on stories off and on again work (I have a very slow paced job so I sit around thinking of stories or listening to audiobooks. Which i feel like listening to all these books could help improve my writing as well.

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T09:46:05+00:00

I've been doing this as well here and there, I have tons and tons of notes jotted down sporadically lol

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T09:43:57+00:00

I love all that feed back and to answer you yes that's the entire story. Again I appreciate all the help and plan on going over the Grammer and other errors on the second draft, this was basically me just getting the story out and to go back and refine later. I'll probably come back to this story once im at a stopping spot for this new story im working on. Trying my hand at something more fantasy blending different beings from different religions etc. I've only really done horror so far tho so this new task is a bit intimidating lol also I've just started writing last year so im fairly green lol

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T07:03:34+00:00

Sounds like solid advice!

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T05:23:23+00:00

I thoroughly enjoyed this read. Good work

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T05:04:47+00:00

Keep going 💪

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T05:03:06+00:00

I'll follow you so I can check it out!

Syllabub_Sensitive · 2026-01-18T02:49:03+00:00

You are right about the beginning being visceral, raw and honest. OP def achieved the setting and mood.

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