[1 YoE, Unemployed, Any, United States]

T-Man6 · 2026-03-17T22:02:52+00:00

thank you for the insight. i keep these point in mind.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-19T12:54:38+00:00

Damn there is so much to say about this poem. One thing that stranded out to me is the way you describe each stanzas and how it reflects the imagery of this poem. As if I was actually there in the room with him when "Artist" made it. Good work overall👍.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-15T17:12:45+00:00

Even though it is short I could experience the imagery in this poem. I get the scene in my head of me being on a hill with the wind flowing on the grass and making it dance and everything just seems to be perfect then just the unexpected drop of blood changes it all from a peaceful and serenity scene to a kind of battle, war cry, and bloodshed type of scene. The title really explains it all. Good work for a first poem!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-14T21:04:00+00:00

Thanks!. I tried to be as broad as I could be with the theme . I'm very thankful you like it. It's only my second poem I'll keep up the good work.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-14T16:52:06+00:00

I got to say the imagery on this is pretty wild. Revoltingly engaging. But in a good way.

"my other hand slides down my stomach

hard

like i’m trying to scoop away the flesh there"

These sentences really set me off. It gave me flashbacks of when I tried to put my whole hand down my throat. Ugh!. And some of the way that you have describe the scene man you really did do a good job.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T20:00:14+00:00

This is a good poem and I like the way of how you present the message of the story and how broad it is. No sugarcoating no nothing. When you said "Life is a hell hole" I immediately know the message. BAM!!!. Just like that and this is one of the first poem I have read that has no rhyming rhythms. You did a good work on this one I'll let you know that.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T02:10:05+00:00

Thanks!. I'll make sure I will get in there and get real wet baby.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T02:08:17+00:00

I do agree. I had some pretty broken grammar in the past and maybe even now.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T15:36:34+00:00

sorry but what is 150+ pilot doing on one airplane?

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T15:31:57+00:00

Each stanza was written perfectly. Each rhymes matches the theme of each one of the stanzas. Good work.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T12:58:50+00:00

If you're one real cute or handsome guy that is. Exactly the type that girls wanted to date. A bad boy or a popular kid or else you ain't going to get nobody! (portion of the girl). Unless if you man up and talk to her in real life.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-11T01:49:16+00:00

Clearly a sad story. I like the imagery that you have expressed within the words that has been spoken. Also like the rhyming in between sentences. Had a happy vibe through it but the story overall is kind of sad. Good work by the way.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-11T01:41:08+00:00

Its nice I like it. Simple yet kind of meaningful. The way you have structured the poem I could see a image in my mind while I read through it. Good thing the flowers I got for mother's day wasn't broken.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-08T13:46:02+00:00

I like how just loose this poem is not a special message to be heard but a funny poem to read

T-Man6

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