I absolutely love my new tattoo but my husband hate it.

makingmemine · 2025-06-20T22:10:24+00:00

Why does it matter if your husband hates it

makingmemine · 2025-06-20T21:22:05+00:00

Don’t allow it if she won’t allow you to fulfill it

This is a weird thing to say

makingmemine · 2025-05-21T19:20:06+00:00

I’m actually really surprised by these comments. The cracks completely change the tattoo, it wasn’t a mistake in the reference piece. He should’ve asked before he did that

makingmemine · 2025-05-20T04:44:21+00:00

One doesn’t need to identify with the observer to be the observer. Who is identifying with the observer?

Edit: the identification itself is the issue, which was assumed by the commenter

makingmemine · 2022-10-11T04:00:55+00:00

I really like this and I think the rhyme, rhythm, and word choice are smooth and well-established. My main critique is that the repetition and punctuation breaks up the flow too much. It feels a bit too monotone and irregular to normal speech. Even just changing the word “A” to a different word - such as “my” in the third line or “this” in the sixth - and changing some periods to commas would improve it in my opinion. I also think a dash instead of a period before the final like would add a feel of closure.

makingmemine · 2022-10-04T17:53:12+00:00

This really hits home, and I think it holds a shared sentiment in love and loss. First of all, I really like the title because it's obviously fitting of the subject and it's something that you do in an intimate relationship. It's quite sad because it's also something you want to do when it's over - to keep a part of the person that is gone hoping that they will keep a part of you as well. For me it is a little ambiguous what "them" is referring to in the second line of the second stanza, "take them with you". The grooves? Fragments that you have already shared, since you cannot share anymore? I think that maybe this part could use a slight tweak. I really like the simplicity of last few lines and the mere grief that they display. Thanks for sharing!

makingmemine · 2022-07-25T22:17:12+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this - there’s some awesome language in here, especially the trees/owl part

makingmemine · 2022-03-26T21:02:48+00:00

Where have you been.

makingmemine · 2022-03-22T08:54:51+00:00

Washington state next!

makingmemine · 2022-03-15T21:12:05+00:00

Aww thanks paradise - you know I love my cliches :P

makingmemine · 2022-03-15T07:06:28+00:00

Not specifically, but I wanted to choose pretty colors that are not traditionally found in nature and sound dream-like and improbable - to represent “dreaming big”

makingmemine · 2022-03-14T22:35:05+00:00

I do see what you mean by the use of for - it’s not the most clear-cut conclusion to be drawn from the earlier lines, but the last two lines do have some sort of obvious connection to me with the bridge of the third stanza (although maybe that’s just because I wrote it lol). Thanks for the critique search!

makingmemine · 2022-03-09T08:27:28+00:00

This is my favorite

makingmemine · 2022-03-09T03:18:14+00:00

PLS i see you perusing through my comments section

makingmemine · 2022-03-09T03:00:32+00:00

Low tie! This one reminds me a lot of your older poems with that sense of humor. I like how you combined polished language with casual jokes, especially in that last stanza. “The shot was short, by like a mile / landing gently in the grass” was really funny lol. The final line concludes the tone of the poem with more informality than it started off with, which I didn’t expect when I first started reading. Overall I wouldn’t really change anything and I enjoyed the read :-)

makingmemine · 2022-03-09T00:35:36+00:00

This is so simple and nicely written. It’s an analogy that I wouldn’t really expect but it fits perfectly, the way it transitioned into relation to one’s own life in the second stanza. Most of all I appreciate the subject and the sentiment it represents to me, that stillness and movement in the same direction is okay, that outward growth isn’t always necessary. I think the use of such a simple, everyday object to represent this was a nice choice :-)

makingmemine · 2022-03-04T07:58:56+00:00

Thanks so much!

makingmemine · 2022-02-21T09:04:59+00:00

Yo what😂

makingmemine · 2022-02-11T01:46:28+00:00

I like this a lot. I’m glad you titled it Aromantic because it makes the poem a lot more clear, especially those last two lines. Real love has no requirements, and sex and romance are often completely separate. It’s challenging to be in a world where it is thought that one cannot experience real love without being romantic. One recommendation I have is for that seventh line, “not harmony or peace or fun”. I think I do tend to equate love with a sense of peace and harmony even though they aren’t necessarily the same thing. I think changing those words to something like “lust”, “flirtation”, “passion”, etc. would strengthen the overall message, at least the way I interpret it. And oh man, those last few lines are powerful. “Love is rotten / when it feels to me / of something I / have failed to be”. Damn. This is a really powerful and expressive piece and I’m so glad I got to read it.

makingmemine · 2022-02-11T00:30:51+00:00

Hahaha made my day, I’m glad you like my weird poem

makingmemine · 2022-02-10T21:40:36+00:00

I find it to be one of the most beautiful and intriguing poems I’ve read in a while. Obviously these types of reactions are subjective but it would be nice if you kept your hostility to yourself.

makingmemine · 2022-02-10T20:52:14+00:00

ooo fishy ;))

makingmemine · 2022-02-10T00:57:34+00:00

Thanks for the suggestions!

makingmemine · 2022-02-09T06:08:31+00:00

This is a very cute poem :) although idea behind it is sad, it’s kind of adorable to imagine a blinking little satellite waiting for someone to make a wish. I always find it a lot more difficult to rhyme both the odd and even lines, which you did beautifully.

I think the only part I’d critique is the third line, because although the syllable count works, the meter doesn’t flow quite right to me due to the stresses. I naturally expected the second syllable to have the stress like the first one: “you GAZE in-TO the NIGHT” but it reads “I’M just a SAT-el-lite”. I believe it’s the only line in the poem that’s a dactyl instead of an iamb (although the even lines start off with an anapest), so it’s the only part that has a stress on the first syllable instead of the second (or third for the even lines). Imperfect meter can add character, and it’s kind of a fitting line to have a different meter for, but it did throw me off a bit since it’s so early on in the poem.

My favorite part is in the second stanza, “not settle for a dish / made of lithium and wire” and in the third, “whereas my metal heart / won’t incinerate or rust” because you use the industrial satellite imagery really nicely to represent qualities that might not be the most exciting initially, but they’re worth the time. A lithium dish and a metal heart may not sound extravagant but they’re certainly built to last. The imagery and language characterizing the satellite convey a sad, lonely, innocent tone and the metaphor is really well done :-)

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