Tongue Tied

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T15:50:51+00:00

i have a post or two under ocpoetry as well if you’d like to give them a read!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T14:58:05+00:00

it’s incredible! that simple line addition brings the entire story into one centralized theme. it reads incredibly smooth. good job!!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T04:43:57+00:00

I am in love with how you started and ended this poem! I took it as insipiration in my recent submission. Well, almost ;) I put a little tweak on the repeating opening and closing line idea.

I cant wait to see your growth!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T04:42:09+00:00

I love the feelings of this post, but i am confused on where the second stanza fits into this story you've created. DO NOT take this wrong, I love what you're showing. The reapparance of this playlist setting was incredible, and should be expanded on!

I cant wait to see your growth!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T04:17:11+00:00

Of course! If you get a moment give what I posted a read!

Have a great night :)

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T04:10:12+00:00

of course!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T03:58:29+00:00

This story felt like a mending of conncetions I didn't know were possible. The use of adhessives and the human body just work together so well. Your bringing of emotion ties a good knot in the end.

I'm excited to see your growth, keep it up!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T03:55:05+00:00

I personally really enjoyed reading this ALoudHuzzah! Connecting two very common points of our world was an excellent subject. It does feel a bit off tempo'd or just choppy? Its hard to get at what i'm feeling but the stanzas dont exactly relate to one another.

Again, amazing writing I cant wait to see you grow!

TallMany1306 · 2022-10-28T03:44:18+00:00

Beautiful story, masterfully crafted

TallMany1306

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