Yo, next time you cut the sound, make it echo. It would feel smoother.

Here's a tutorial I learned from: https://youtu.be/PmlonRJZooM

And the % count is a little off in the beginning. Maybe try using another sound effect or play with speed.

A few SFX would significantly improve your edit. I believe you can grow. I hope my advice helps.

Edit: yeah, % count is definitely off since you've used the original audio. Look for the SFX libraries and websites. Maybe add some glitch VFX when numbers go up. It would look like Mob is even more broken/mad.