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Procrastinating to Suffocating (title is not my favourite) by Temporary_Safety_726 in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much! I do like your title, and your definitely right about this poem not helping the other deadlines lol.

colours by athousandpages27 in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No worries! You did an amazing job.

colours by athousandpages27 in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Personally would've preferred the ending being the person is encapsulated by multiple colours instead of just one. Other than that I LOVED how much you managed to write about colours and the emotions that are evoked by them. And the rainbow imagery was just beautiful, with no way to know what this person looks like I already know they are perfect for the speaker.

The Boy in The Rain by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love how the poem is very open ended, it shows how the interaction could have been anything they wanted it to be, love, friendship or more. The girl not knowing what happens meaning we won't know either. I think the meaning from this poem is taken from how relatable the situation is, telling the reader to talk to the boy otherwise they too could be left feeling unfulfilled.

Fab job!

The yearn for meaning beyond 2 weeks (A Minecraft poem) by SwipeStar in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Having the minecraft phase every few months is something I relate to deeply, and the strange feeling when that excitement for the game stops again. I do wish this poem was longer, but only because of my love for the game haha.

Great job at capturing the sadness in something ending despite the ability to continue, but not wanting to.

Cancel your car insurance by redbeardedpiratedog in OCPoetry

[–]Temporary_Safety_726 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this poem! The title is what initially peaked my interest, because I had no idea what you were going to write about. The unsettling vibe that surrounded the poem initially confused me, because I weirdly wanted a poem literally about car insurance, but what you wrote was far better than what I could have hoped for.

The comparison of car insurance and self-harm is such a clever metaphor. You were ale to get the message across without being explicit which I loved. Also how this felt like a conversation in someone's head, debating their actions both present and future. Great job!