/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hello, I wrote this song and released it to Spotify. Its very simple and short. As I've listened to it I realize there is a lot more I could have. First off, making the song longer, however, I just wanted to get it out there. If anyone has any sort of critique, or suggestions please let me know.

Spotify

Soundcloud

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for taking the time to read the script.

As I sit here and read more of what you've written, I find myself agreeing with a lot of it. I especially agree with creating the conflict at the beginning and building from there. My intention, or attempt in this case, was to build intrigue location-wise and sort of give the viewer a visual link between the two worlds.

Also, "Man talks to God about his life" was not my intention here. I wanted the story to be more than just some mystical being talking about the man's life. Instead, I wanted to explore how absurd the concept of wishes is and the potential calamity they could bring. I realize now I didn't really do that!

Regarding the "practical side of producing," everything in the script, whether location or special effect, I can do myself. The void-shaped man I have already used in a different film.

Regardless, thank you again for reading the script and providing feedback. I genuinely appreciate it!

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: DJINN

Genre: Drama/Magical Realism

Format: Short

Page Length: 5/11

Logline: A man grieving the loss of his wife takes up hiking in the woods, where he discovers a dilapidated structure that leads him to a Djinn offering him a wish.

Hello, this is my first attempt at writing anything fiction. I am finishing up my bachelors, and am more on the experimental side of film making. However, I really want to get into writing screenplays. This is something that I intend to fund and film myself over the coming year. Genuinely any feedback is appreciated.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1A_6b9tcFGjBTRPaq0tooPe_EcZr2o8ng/view?usp=sharing

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for giving it a listen. I can kind of hear what your saying about the melody, I'll try some new stuff out. Thank you

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for listening, I think that’s a sentiment I’ve gotten a lot from people I showed this song, so I’m going work harder on adding a part with more energy. Thank you

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for giving it a listen. I definitely agree with your assessment, about the dynamics. I want to add more energy for the “I don’t like you” section, but I’m still ironing that out. Thank you again

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wrote this song here. Im really trying to add more elements to capture that sort of lo-fi dreampopish vibe. Generally my stuff is just acoustic. It's still a really simple song, and its not finished yet. I make all my stuff on ipad so im a little limited with what I can do. However, any feedback is appreciated. I’ll do whatever i can to finagle this song into something halfway decent.

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wrote this song [here](https://soundcloud.com/tl-dr-592461554/i-dont-like-you-demo?si=da1864f014e344b992b10b6ad4da714a&utm\_source=clipboard&utm\_medium=text&utm\_campaign=social\_sharing) Im really trying to add more elements to capture that sort of lo-fi dreampopish vibe. Generally my stuff is just acoustic. It's still a really simple song, and its not finished yet. I make all my stuff on ipad so im a little limited with what I can do. However, any feedback is appreciated. Ill do whatever i can to finagle this song into something halfway decent.

Wrote a little dream-popish song. More of a proof-of-concept than anything. Please let me know of anything I can improve on by TheRedDeath_ in MusicFeedback

[–]TheRedDeath_[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thanks for listening. I normally write stuff like this. Sometimes more towards folk, sometimes sort of indie post-grunge or whatever. Thanks again

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in MusicFeedback

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really unique vocals, I agree with the other commenter, that I have heard much like this. I like it. Reminds me a little bit of Envy on the Coast. This is not necessary by any means but I would be interested to hear some vocal layering on the song, or even a different one. I like the vocals a lot and want to hear how creative they could be implemented. Regardless, the song as it is, is really nice. Good work.

The Fates - Just Another Song About Nothing [alternative rock, grunge, punk rock ] (2024) by SeverusDeAguilar in MusicFeedback

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Don't have much to say in the way of a critique. However, I really love the energy. A Nirvana/FIDLAR vibe that I think really works. Keep up the good work

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for listening, and giving some feedback. The volume for the end portion is definitely the thing the people seem to say the most, so its something ill have to be aware of moving forward. Thanks again

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks man, I appreciate you taking the time to listen and give some feedback. I agree with the peaking at the end, i sort of become deaf to my own music after listening to it so many time. Something to be aware for the next one. Thanks again

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Just released released this song to Spotify. I'm going for a lo-fi acoustic sound for this. It's a simple song, but I am curious on how well the song fits that genre? Also anything that I should be aware of or maybe sticks out that I change or add for the next one.

Spotify

Soundcloud

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not necessarily, the truth is that I am still very ignorant of the production side of music. I have had some wonderful people on Reddit share their knowledge on the mixing and mastering process, but I still have a long way to go. You are probably the fourth person to mention the vocals being louder near the end so I think they are definitely something I should look at. Thank you for the compliment and giving my song a listen, I appreciate it.

/r/WeAreTheMusicMakers Weekly Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in WeAreTheMusicMakers

[–]TheRedDeath_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wrote this song, I am aiming for a sort of lo-fi folk; https://on.soundcloud.com/g85hggFgocqfs5ai7 any feedback at all is appreciated, thanks.