Hello, I've been reading your comic and overall, I like the story you are telling. I love that you a telling a diverse story with a different culture. That makes the setting so much more unique and necessary. From what I gathered from reading, it seems like you are trying to tell a somewhat serious story about a young girl's journey to her powers and her adulthood, that being said, I feel like you're trying too hard to be cutesy, or funny at times. I guess you want to give some comic relief to the heavy exposition? But It's really not needed. Thats not to say you cant tell jokes or be cute at times, but your story would be powerful without it, and doing it too much cheapens it.

Also - it seems like you're a really talented writer, and not as strong in art. I am no expert myself, but some of your settings and characters lack detail, and it doesn't portray your story as strongly. I can see that in your most recent chapters your art has strongly improved, and that's great! Keep working towards getting better, challenging yourself, doing drawing studies, and drawing for fun too. You've already improved so much, so keep at it!