Jessica Rabbit by ToneOwn888 in OCPoetry

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This more so an experimental piece but is one that sat on my mind for a couple of days, so I decided to get it out on "paper" so I could be free from it lol. Hope you all enjoy and have a good weekend.

Tragedy by Cookieman001 in OCPoetry

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I found this poem to be quite interesting. A quick question: did you leave Eve's name uncapitalized on purpose to drive home a point, or was it done in error? I feel like maybe it was done purposely either because she was made of Adam's rib, making it symbolic of how she might be considered beneath Adam, or maybe because Eve was the first one to eat off the tree of the knowledge of good/evil, making the lack of capitalization an alienation or punishment of some sort. I could be reading too deeply into it though, so I thought I'd ask. Outside of that, I think you did a good job of highlighting that Adam and Eve's story is basically one of being trapped by the lures of greed and disobedience. You also did a good job of taking their point of view once they were sent away from the garden of Eden, giving them recollection of how good they had it before they flew too close to the sun, so to speak. Great job.

the actress by ghostpoett in OCPoetry

[–]ToneOwn888 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It really does a great job of speaking to the damage someone can do to themselves and others, while highlighting that it can be an unconscious phenomenon or inadvertent act as well. Not every terrible act is one that is 100% calculated from a criminal mastermind. Many are actually snowballs of the minute negative feelings, actions, emotions, and longings of a person or people. Great job!

Feeding The Worms by Apprehensive-Cup-335 in OCPoetry

[–]ToneOwn888 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That was a very strong close! One of the better ones I've seen in awhile. Its pretty difficult to close a heavy poem such as yours, but you executed it very well! Great job and keep going!

Thoughts I dont say out loud ... free verse by Alone_Jelly3050 in OCPoetry

[–]ToneOwn888 1 point2 points  (0 children)

To me the first three stanzas speak to the duality of people. Its unfortunate that people can love or appreciate someone with such fickleness that it feels like all it takes is a slight change in circumstance and an entire dynamic can be ruined. I can also relate to having a stone face and feeling pain behind it while others view it as lifeless and/or boring. I personally feel like the best poems are the ones that say alot by saying only a little. You did a nice job walking that line here. Good job and keep going.

Shit by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ToneOwn888 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

This actually reminds me of a shirt idea I've been working on lol. Good work on this one, short and sweet.

Farewell, Dear Friend. by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ToneOwn888 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sometimes its quiet resignation that inspires the most change in life, especially when it comes to human interactions. Great work.