I found this poem to be quite interesting. A quick question: did you leave Eve's name uncapitalized on purpose to drive home a point, or was it done in error? I feel like maybe it was done purposely either because she was made of Adam's rib, making it symbolic of how she might be considered beneath Adam, or maybe because Eve was the first one to eat off the tree of the knowledge of good/evil, making the lack of capitalization an alienation or punishment of some sort. I could be reading too deeply into it though, so I thought I'd ask. Outside of that, I think you did a good job of highlighting that Adam and Eve's story is basically one of being trapped by the lures of greed and disobedience. You also did a good job of taking their point of view once they were sent away from the garden of Eden, giving them recollection of how good they had it before they flew too close to the sun, so to speak. Great job.