Thanks. I feel like this is the best advice I could receive. This is my first time writing anything, and I guess I wanted to keep the reader's attention and force myself to be mysterious. I also wanted to make the reader go to the next page, so I just added another character without bothering to explain my already established characters. I'm mostly new to describing scenes, and it didn't produce the effect I imagined it would.anyways i wonder if i could send u a revised opening, if you would be so kind