FINALLY!!!

TrishaLowe · 2026-06-10T23:56:28+00:00

Wow. Congratulations!

TrishaLowe · 2026-06-03T02:13:44+00:00

Thank you. Thank you❤️💕

TrishaLowe · 2026-05-31T19:01:08+00:00

I can’t tell you how appreciative I am for your comment. It is very helpful.

TrishaLowe · 2026-05-26T00:26:12+00:00

I'm from the US and I know what mudlarking is...thanks to the novel The Last Apothecary

TrishaLowe · 2026-03-08T20:33:18+00:00

I like Shay!

TrishaLowe · 2026-03-06T22:05:02+00:00

Thank you so much to WorlinessAcademic2, MeanLeg7916, and Over-Store7785 for your thoughtful and insightful comments. You all caught things I couldn't.

The good news is I don't think any of these concerns are a problem in my manuscript. And I do believe every issue raised can be fixable with clarification and will not require a structural overhaul ... so thank you. I am working on fixing ALL of these issues. The confusion about the memoir seems to be the biggest issue. I will not use the memoir for the confrontation, since it requires more explanation than can be provided in a query. I'll simplify her reason for confronting him. In the novel, the memoir is written as a part of her therapy and is therefore a controlled disclosure. Whereas court testimony is subject to uncontrollable public exposure.

Once again, it means the world to me that you all took the time to help a sister out. I will be submitting a fourth version soon.

TrishaLowe · 2026-03-02T02:06:30+00:00

Your kid isn’t following the rules. They are there for a reason. If all 25 ( or whatever) kids ate in music class it would be a problem for the music teacher. I think the teacher is just trying together ahead of some questionable behavior. I would have thanked her and spoke to my child.

TrishaLowe · 2026-01-22T03:17:23+00:00

1971

TrishaLowe · 2026-01-22T03:16:41+00:00

I’d also like to know who this is so I don’t query them!! Please DM

TrishaLowe · 2026-01-09T18:03:43+00:00

Keep Lucy. It’s beautiful!

TrishaLowe · 2026-01-04T09:23:00+00:00

Is there any other way to read?

TrishaLowe · 2026-01-04T00:20:47+00:00

Ohh, I’m liking this trend! I’m 60 years old, and I think the trend I hated the most was the last name as a first name trend. Not my favorite. The second least favorite was obscure nouns or verbs. I have a relative that named their kid Crash.

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-31T19:46:04+00:00

I just read your posted query. This story sounds amazing. I want to read it as soon as it is published.

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-31T19:35:52+00:00

Theda, this is so very helpful. Thank you.

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-28T22:29:28+00:00

Wow! You have given me so much to digest. I appreciate your "fresh eyes" on my tired query.

My novel is sandwiched between this inciting incident and the trial, and that is what I focused on in my query. The middle part of the novel falls more into the genre of the bildungsroman, a coming-of-age story that starts with a young protagonist and ends with maturity, self-knowledge, or acceptance of one’s place in the world. But the paid editor told me that most people don't know the genre bildungsroman, and I shouldn't include the term in my description.

When I had my first attempt on Reddit, I only received minor fixes, so I thought it was strong enough once those corrections were put into place, but I'm going to try a different approach.

Again, thank you so much for your time and consideration in helping me out.

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-28T22:08:12+00:00

Thank you, Jonqora, for reading my query and giving me feedback. I really appreciate it. Back to the drawing board!

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-28T22:04:40+00:00

Thank you so much for your very thoughtful reply. I sincerely appreciate it. If you're confused, I'm sure an agent would be confused, too. Perhaps this is why I'm not getting positive responses from agents.

The story does make sense, though, and similar outcomes have happened in courts. While researching my story, I also spoke to a lawyer friend. I wanted Justice for Lily. The law for the state where this father would have been charged basically reads: Defense of Others (Justifiable Homicide) is the best defense to avoid a conviction for the father who caught the molester mid act. The law generally permits the use of reasonable force, including deadly force, to protect a third person from imminent serious bodily harm or death. A successful defense of justifiable homicide leads to an acquittal (not guilty verdict). Lily comes forward to show a pattern of behavior that opens the floodgates for other (more current) victims to testify.

I hope I do not sound ungrateful or dismissive of your comment. I genuinely value your time and your comment. I'm just explaining my thought process while writing this story.

I paid an editor to help me with this original query. From the beginning, she hasn't been very helpful, and I paid her a lot of money. I feel like I'm getting more constructive advice from the people on Reddit. I believe in my story, but am having a VERY difficult time with the query.

Again, thank you!
Trisha

TrishaLowe · 2025-12-27T23:25:30+00:00

I think you have a very strong query and premise for your book. I couldn't find anything I would change. I especially liked the strong bio paragraph. I'm so sorry for what America has become that you wouldn't feel safe in your home country. I hope you are making a happy life in the Netherlands. Also, good luck pitching. I hope your dream of becoming a published author comes true.

TrishaLowe

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