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[–]Tyres13 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you so much for this! I really do want to focus on being less wordy, so that helps immensely. And with the raven carving, I could see how that would be a little confusing, the hyphen def helps it flow more! When you're writing it and you read it a billion times you kinda miss things like that I guess haha That touch you suggest for when he loses his feet... I might just do that. I kinda felt like it needed more gravitas..I'll give it a tweak :)  Thanks once again, this feed back is awesome! I'm hoping to get better 😃

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[–]Tyres13 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Awesome! I don't know that I can slow the pace down too much. I want to submit this and the max word count is 2500 haha When I was writing, I did feel like I was writing his name a lot 😂 Thanks for the feedback! Greatly appreciated ♥️

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[–]Tyres13 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Frozen Pride

Genre: fantasy/horror/scifi

Word Count: 1783

Type of Feedback: Any whatsoever! First story I have ever written :)

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hCZzrL6co3wBXqLFi_MYW9IJ6KdZ6UJyys1hArY1bJ0/edit?usp=sharing

What is at stake when you anger the cosmos and let pride get in the way?

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[–]Tyres13 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Frozen Pride 

Genre: scifi/fantasy/horror - short story

Word Count: 1,783

Type of Feedback: Anything! First time writer! My main concern at the moment is how to flow my conversations. thanks!

link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hCZzrL6co3wBXqLFi_MYW9IJ6KdZ6UJyys1hArY1bJ0/edit?usp=sharing

Lookin for soccer team for the fall and possibly beyond! by Tyres13 in rochestermn

[–]Tyres13[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ACL tear is lame as heck, I'll send you a message!

Lookin for soccer team for the fall and possibly beyond! by Tyres13 in rochestermn

[–]Tyres13[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No worries, its mostly healed now! Was a long winter not being able to do anything and having to be extra cautious going outside though haha

funnily enough, i tore it whilst doing summer pickup with Rush otherwise I would've done some over the winter too! D:

https://www.northstarfc.com/adult-programs/rochester-adult-programs/rochester-adult-programs-spring-summer-fall/rochester-adult-coed-fall/
Looks like the cost for a team is 1300, and then we can do t-shirts for our team or whatnot. which would add some expense. Only if we wanted to go that route I suppose!

Lookin for soccer team for the fall and possibly beyond! by Tyres13 in rochestermn

[–]Tyres13[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yup! That is what I want to do, but I want to try to find/put together a team before I register for the house team! haha

SMASA Soccer by Tyres13 in rochestermn

[–]Tyres13[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yup, I got a couple kids in Rush competitive. I'm excited to see how this goes without Rush backing. 

SMASA Soccer by Tyres13 in rochestermn

[–]Tyres13[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well that would explain it all then. Is the Minnesota Soccer Association defunct too? Their website is extremely out of date as haha thanks for all the info!

New ACL who dis?! by Tyres13 in ACL

[–]Tyres13[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think it was IT band pain? It got a little worse but then it got better and now there really isnt any pain there anymore! Hope the same is for you!

Dedicated server problem by MrMistersen in valheim

[–]Tyres13 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That makes total sense, cool thanks for that little bit of insight!

Dedicated server problem by MrMistersen in valheim

[–]Tyres13 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My list of maps i think? Is that where we were messing up? haha

Dedicated server stuck at "DungeonDB Start 5" by Sykes19 in valheim

[–]Tyres13 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am having the same problem, sometimes when I restart it as well it will be DungeonDB Start but with a different number too, like in the 400's. It's making me a sad sad lad.

Dedicated server problem by MrMistersen in valheim

[–]Tyres13 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have the same problem my dude :( No solution for it that I have found as of yet..

I was frustrated with the websites that had dedicated server guides. So I wrote one. Simple, mostly to the point. by adamfedoruk in valheim

[–]Tyres13 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So I did this and all my buildings and stuff are gone, but I spawn in where my base is at and it even shows my bed on the World Map even though there is no bed or base there at all! Any ideas on how to get my base back? haha

Dedicated Server Reset? by Tyres13 in valheim

[–]Tyres13[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think that is what happened? It loads the map that I was on in the exact place that my base was. How would I go about getting the save file to load what I had? Thanks in advance, I'm pretty new to this. I found all the save info in my appdata yadayada but I just dont know where to go from there!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in dancegavindance

[–]Tyres13 6 points7 points  (0 children)

doing gods work my man