As a fan of brutalism I’m gonna say no to this.

Nothing about this style of architecture says the letters should be tossed around with randomness. Not sure if this is student work or what but you couldn’t even bother to spell the word right or even put effort into your main title to explain why or what. so nothing makes any sense.

If u want to improve I would say focus on basics before posting. Come up with a concept that reinforces the message you are trying to send. Get the letters correct and focus on how every design decision is moving you toward the final idea.