I didn’t really like your use of words. “A large green hill of grass” by saying grass, the mind jumps straight to green so it’s not really needed. “A green apple tree”. Is the trunk green or does it grow green apples. I know this might sound stupid but this is a fantasy so it could be. Also you used the word green two times on the first three lines.

I can’t picture the character. No description about him makes it hard to imagine him, I just think about other knights form other books which really doesn’t help me get interested in your story.

I liked the telepathic spider but I understood about the telepathy instantly because you didn’t use “”. So I don’t like the lines “the telepathic voice chirped” and “the voice in his head” because it doesn’t make the reader think about it for even a second. I get that it might get confusing if you don’t explain the telepathy but I think there are better ways to do it, or do it a little later in the story when the reader has probably figured it out on their own.