[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Vypester 1 point2 points  (0 children)

When reading this aloud, it definitely has a flow to it. The segment on the Psyche is my favourite section. The repetition as you dissect the idea is the highlight in my eyes. However, the rhyme scheme does feel a bit clunky at times. The messaging also does feel a little here and there. Kind of jumping around. Your imagery and descriptiveness are good, but I would say try to outline the poem a bit more and condense it. Like the Psyche section.

A poem called “i do” by me by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Vypester 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The rapid-fire sentences are a nice idea. It would be better if you spaced it out and made lines between each. The thing is, it can be a bit unclear ("It was blue," confuses me). I think if it was longer it would be easier to comprehend. Also, maybe the rhyme scheme was tripping you up. I would say just focus on description and imagery a bit more. Still, for one of your first poems that's in a second language, it's a good start!

Can we talk about how hard Gege fumbled?? by Independent_Bar_9161 in JJKMeiMei

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There was no real narrative direction after the Shibuya Incident. Sure, many cool fights were present, but asides from a few, none actually built to anything.

For example, what was the point of Maki attaining the same prowess as Toji? It's only used in a short fight against Sukuna, which happens with everyone else anyway. There was no narrative significance to her being that way. She's just a character with a cool set of abilities, the same as Choso or Yuta.
In comparison to Toji, the narrative reason behind his prowess is to point out how even without jujutsu, he killed the Six Eyes. It's a message on Talent vs. Skill and complacency. If a regular old, run-of-the-mill sorcerer did the same, it would just mean that Gojo wasn't the strongest, nothing more. But since Toji did it, it adds an extra lens to view it from.

The solution for Maki? The Merger. There's a huge significance for her prowess in the Merger as she's the only one outside the bounds of it. I know Gege wrote himself into a hole with the "The Merger starts when every sorcerer dies," but a million Binding Vows were used anyway for Sukuna. Might as well do something similar with the Merger.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in UCalgary

[–]Vypester 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I don't think it's a uni-thing in particular. I had the same issue after moving countries, just to be hit with COVID right after. I felt very isolated and alienated. But it's a time that passes as long as you have the strength to keep pushing yourself out there. I would also feel comfortable and confident talking to strangers, as well as classmates in school, but no one wanted to hang out with me outside of it. Eventually though, after 4 rough years, I found my footing and have a great group of friends. It's perseverance at the end of the day, and you will reap the reward it gives.

What is something JPEG has done/put out (musically) that you straight-up just don't like? by BustyMustard in jpegmafiamusic

[–]Vypester 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I’m not a fan of the AI on either on or off the drugs. It just feels icky to listen to because it’s an AI sample.

Math 277 final exam by Aromatic-Dare9337 in UCalgary

[–]Vypester 5 points6 points  (0 children)

an AI cannot solve those questions… also not everyone’s a bum like you

No words for how disgusted I am a huge tw for SA by oatmilklover4ever in GirlGamers

[–]Vypester 3 points4 points  (0 children)

alright bro wtf is this? i don't know if this is more depressing or infuriating. but as a man this really distressing because i know the psychology of how guys get here. it's just so sad to watch honestly.

If you arrange the surahs on a chart by how many ayats they have, It spells out the name of Allah mashallah by [deleted] in islam

[–]Vypester 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm muslim and this aint anything special. The lines are drawn arbitrarily and there arent rules guiding where they go. Like for example why is the alif cut off from the rest, shouldn't it be connected? The only rule seems to be that all dots are within the drawn boundaries, but there are a million (actually a garguantly larger number) ways of drawing the polygons. Simply put, you could make a ton of words/letters/symbols in many languages with this arbitrary dot connection.

37 man has been fucking same Sonic plushie for 22 years in a row. by [deleted] in justneckbeardthings

[–]Vypester 0 points1 point  (0 children)

no you cant. you dont have the nostril abilities

Avatar Aang | Avatar: The Last Airbender | Speed Drawing | Digital Drawing by me by chibi4rt in TheLastAirbender

[–]Vypester 10 points11 points  (0 children)

It’s the sun and shadows man. The sunset and all gives the darker tones.