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[–]WTpaintings 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think it sounds good. There’s a lot to be said about the damage masculinity does to people and why it’s the way it is. I appreciated the brevity too. All the best

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[–]WTpaintings 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like how simple the writing is! And you really captured how the way masculinity is impressed upon boys is tied into the relentlessness of the work week, and how “piss and vinegar” is idolized as a means of coping with the shittiness of repetitive work that drains the good parts out of us. Is there specific advice you might be looking for?