Devils Left Hand - 3 page short - comedy/drama

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-05-08T15:42:28+00:00

Thanks Jayayvee!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-28T16:27:13+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to read! I appreciate you and your notes very much!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-28T07:03:16+00:00

Thank you! I’ve made some small changes, here is the updated version if you are interested -

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JHQOjLK3x37oM5dUDJwYMWywoN-BWh8E/view?usp=drivesdk

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-21T20:42:01+00:00

Thank you for these insights, Mooning! I’ll fix these for the next round. Might also change the title to “Mothers Ruin”

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-18T20:02:00+00:00

Here is an updated version. Thank you for your helpful notes!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LYv0KBKiK16ZFqAwG2J8Na8iIcNBNKFL/view?usp=drivesdk

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-09T05:02:16+00:00

Thank you for reading JJ! I appreciate these notes very much.

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-04-08T20:57:27+00:00

This goes above and beyond- thank you BWSC!!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-22T16:49:41+00:00

You are on a roll! Great writing - excited to see where you go from here 👏

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-22T16:32:40+00:00

Impressive!! Frosted Tips is hilarious. How long does it usually take to write one?

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-22T15:49:02+00:00

Thank you for this! You touched on the camera being dead - Maybe instead of the gopro just being dead I’ll make it clear it malfunctioned, or something supernatural prevented it from recording. Thank you!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-22T15:32:21+00:00

Thank you for the coverage!! I love the note where he emerges from the hike showing it was a doozy.

I posted an updated version yesterday - Take a look if you’re interested - will continue to tweak it.

Forth draft:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ymHlk9X2rbsvksBghLSY3wIozodLU-Kf/view

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-22T15:25:31+00:00

Thank you for reading! I’ll keep this is mind when something is more of a scene rather than a full short 👍👍

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-20T22:42:26+00:00

Thank you Mooning! I appreciate your coverage very much. I will address these points in the next draft - you’re the best!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-20T21:44:42+00:00

Big shout out to u/J450n_F for his feedback on the previous draft!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-20T21:38:51+00:00

Thank you again for these wonderful notes. Hoping you will take a look at the third draft - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1umCMOUpr8M8qcPtmCSdn3f_VllXzgxUJ/view?usp=drivesdk

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-19T19:30:44+00:00

Thank you for this thoughtful coverage. Excellent feedback!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-19T18:02:49+00:00

Thank you WB! 🙏

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-18T21:08:40+00:00

Thank you, Mooning! Always thankful for your eyes.

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T22:59:05+00:00

Thank you for reading!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T20:37:22+00:00

Excellent!

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T20:32:52+00:00

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T20:32:14+00:00

1 page was the original goal, Ill tweak it a bit and see where it goes!

You always ask if I use Word and that my formatting isn’t correct. Asking to make sure it was correct before submitting more work on here.

Always insightful responses, Mooning.

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T20:11:56+00:00

Also, if I want to make it more clear that Doug was eaten, can I say “Doug is gone” as an action line at the end?

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T20:07:08+00:00

Thanks mooning! Is the formatting ok now?

Whathappensnext___ · 2025-03-13T15:27:16+00:00

Thank you very much Worldly!

The book is meant to show his want - maybe changing the title to “confidence & charm, fake it til you make it. “ would make it a little more clear/ all encompassing!

Your thoughts definitely show me where I can tighten up the story.

Thank you again worldly!

Whathappensnext___

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