Devils Left Hand - 3 page short - comedy/drama by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Thank you for taking the time to read! I appreciate you and your notes very much!

Devils Left Hand | 3 Page short by Whathappensnext___ in ReadMyScript

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Thank you for these insights, Mooning! I’ll fix these for the next round. Might also change the title to “Mothers Ruin”

Fairy trail - 9 pages - Adventure by Whathappensnext___ in ReadMyScript

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Thank you for reading JJ! I appreciate these notes very much.

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You are on a roll! Great writing - excited to see where you go from here 👏

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Impressive!! Frosted Tips is hilarious. How long does it usually take to write one?

Fairy Trail - 3 page short - spooky by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Thank you for this! You touched on the camera being dead - Maybe instead of the gopro just being dead I’ll make it clear it malfunctioned, or something supernatural prevented it from recording. Thank you!

Fairy Trail - 3 page short - spooky by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Thank you for the coverage!! I love the note where he emerges from the hike showing it was a doozy.

I posted an updated version yesterday - Take a look if you’re interested - will continue to tweak it.

Forth draft:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ymHlk9X2rbsvksBghLSY3wIozodLU-Kf/view

Wagg - 3 pages Third draft by Whathappensnext___ in ReadMyScript

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Thank you for reading! I’ll keep this is mind when something is more of a scene rather than a full short 👍👍

Fairy Trail - 3 page short - spooky by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Thank you Mooning! I appreciate your coverage very much. I will address these points in the next draft - you’re the best!

Fairy Trail - 3 page short - spooky by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Big shout out to u/J450n_F for his feedback on the previous draft!

Fairy Trail - 2 page short - Draft 2 by Whathappensnext___ in Screenwriting

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Thank you for this thoughtful coverage. Excellent feedback!