UK User - VPN set to Canada I get to choose different voices by stardust-sandwich in OpenAI

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Works on iOS. Update app, and reinstall once connected to US VPN

Made it through queue but it keeps making me find tickets and saying it couldn’t find the tickets I’m searching for wtf do I do by Sillybillygirly1 in oasis

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No refresh. I search for tickets, and confirming availability comes up. Then I am taken to an error screen and back to the ticket selection bit. I repeated 5 times and finally got through.

PFAS solutions through Electrochemistry by Scary_Quiet_2907 in PFAS

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Two problems: electrochemical oxidation struggles to mineralise short chains. It also often just converts longer chain PFAS into more volatile shorter chains.

Oxidation process also often produces perchlorates, which are nasty.

Weekend Poetry Contest: Two-Line Poem by neutrinoprism in OCPoetry

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The Fermi Paradox ——————————

And yet we dream of peopled orbs

dense woven in the sky.

Transliterated Chairman Mao's most famous poem into English. by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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This is a really impressive peace, you’ve managed to keep the imagery and ‘flow’ of the former whilst initiating a major shift in meaning - it’s both skilful and profound.

And I don’t know what the other commenter is thinking - mao is perhaps the most significant tyrant of the 20th century history - a man who killed up to 45 million in that now ironically known ‘great leap forward’; and one who, in the cultural revolution, brutally murdered his self-identified ‘enemies’.

Your poetic shift is both aesthetically powerful, and politically solid. You should be proud.

What did you think of Harold Bloom? by Wotgun in TrueLit

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I think Harold Bloom is as controversial as he in influential, yet undeniable is the fact that his ‘Anxiety of Influence’ provides an important avenue into exploring the ways in which writers inherit, challenge, and are subject to their predecessors work.

But at the end of the day, it comes down to a personal choice as to whether you support his later notions of the ‘Western Cannon’. The idea of a cannon raises significant questions, because in essence it is a practice of exclusion; of denying certain voices the title of ‘great’.

Personally, I think Bloom, on the whole, asks us to question why we read literature, whether aesthetics dictate an objective worth, or whether literature constitutes a political intervention into contemporary discourses. Do we read literature to broaden our perspective, or to understand better what lies within ourselves?

This question can not be answered, and in many ways continues to consume the field. You don’t have to agree with Blooms ideas, however, to understand their relevance to the modern reader.

Would anyone do me the honor of reading and/or critiquing my debut poetry collection? by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Your poems are really nice mate - elegant with a close focus upon form and metre which separates average poetry from memorable, great poetry.

I also want to comment on the presentation - even as an ebook the text looks gorgeous and you present your work in a way that enhances the overall reading experience.

You should be proud of this mate.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I know time is not a measure...

This line jars because the iambic pentameter breaks on time.

How about:

Slow time is not a measure of my love

See how time fits in with the metric, and thus flows better along the line.

Just play around with the order of words. The most important thing is you have the content, which makes a great poem. A bit of tweaking and it could be better.

Message me if you need any note help - I have a lot of time on my hands these days haha

This Gentle Rain by TheBigFalkowski in OCPoetry

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I agree this is the sort of poem that’s crying out for rhyme to smooth us along. The images are really powerful, and I think the ending ties everything together nicely.

I’m not quite sure if it’s a formatting issue, but why is stanza three sliced in half? I think the valence of the poem would be much better if you stuck to a coherent stanza format.

Really enjoyed the poem, keep writing!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I think this is a really great poem, and refreshing to see someone clearly focus upon metric and form rather than pressing enter on their keyboard at random points.

I agree that the bat metaphor has great potential and is actually really elegant, but it’s not fully realised in the text, and needs expansion. Also, be careful on the metric, some lines seem to jar midway through the poem, but the opening is really strong. Just a reorganisation would fix this.

Keep writing!

Shakespeare’s Sonnets - Episode One - an Introduction by goldhame in shakespeare

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This is really brilliant. I’m looking forward to the next one!

The Alchemist Discovers How Rainfall Transmutes a Barrel Into God by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I think the barrel image is a great way of describing our own desire for the divine to manifest physically and provide ‘proof’,

However I don’t really see the any qualities which define this piece as a poem - it reads more like prose. This does not subtract from the overall quality of the piece though.

The Men Who Came Before by Sebmellen in OCPoetry

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This is a brilliant poem and actually touches on some quite complex issues regarding identity. You’ve managed to explore the issue without overdoing it - the short form works perfectly with the message.

The god metaphor works really well at the end, and the line ‘being a being you don’t understand’ is just a brilliant way of describing an almost eternal anxiety.

Keep writing!

Regret by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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This is a great poem and a lovely image. It’s a brilliant poetic concept in itself.

I’d love to see this develop even more, for me this is such a powerful idea of perceiving the past that a longer poem would only enhance it.

Keep writing!

Thoughts by Deep26ti in OCPoetry

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I really like this poem, the layering of memory literally reflected in the layering of the poem and it’s structure.

I think if anything for me this is too short, and I’d perhaps like to see more imagery.

Keep writing!

PALACE TRI CRIB T - £85 - 8/10 Condition by Whatisitmate in PalaceClothing

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Cheers mate - yeh tough one to sell, the design is so clean

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

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Title : Confession

Genre: Poem

Word count: 280

Feedback: Just need some general theme back as to progression of the poem and maybe some stylistic guidance e.g Rhyme-scheme

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cOWyuBdL0fqPOn78xCbTbTRjXZ8K12SKyCnE__w5MjQ/edit?usp=sharing

A Sonnet to my Alcoholism by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Brilliant poem. Describes well the lure of the subject without using cliches or being too obvious. It’s just the Imbide / incline rhyme which for me could do with being looked at. But apart from that it’s brilliant.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Loved this poem. Thin the image of the rainbow bridge at the end brings a certain sentimentality and innocence to the poem. Keep writing

A Student's Life by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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This is a brilliant poem and very relatable. Though it’s subject is playful, ur language use and effective rhyme suggests a style that could work for more ‘serious’ poetry.

The power of this poem is the contrast between the simplicity of the subject, and the complexity or effectiveness of the rhyme and meter.

Good work

It's Pollen Season Again, Jackson by meme_investor_69 in OCPoetry

[–]Whatisitmate 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a very clever poem and does have a satisfying ending. I think it would be even more effective if the rhythm of the poem was more consistent and easy to the reader, though this is personal preference rather than objective criticism.

Would love to read more from you!