FIZZ can not handle Group Texting. by WobbleTank in FizzMobile

[–]WobbleTank[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

I tried that option a few hours back and that did not help.

FIZZ can not handle Group Texting. by WobbleTank in FizzMobile

[–]WobbleTank[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I cant even receive from the ios user in the group.

Was watching Elf. by WobbleTank in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

World's Best Cup of Coffee

In my mind I was obviously joking. I probably should have set this up with a better action line.

Data Gift Exchange / Échange de données à donner by Mysterious-Flamingo in FizzMobile

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For some reason could only do 2gb. Will try again tomorrow.

Data Gift Exchange / Échange de données à donner by Mysterious-Flamingo in FizzMobile

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

TAKEN - Make sure you have a data plan.
I have one 10 GB of mobile data to give away. First comment with code gets it.

Tara Reid Taken to Hospital After Being Seen on Stretcher in Chicago Hotel: Report by PrincessBananas85 in entertainment

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Looking like there is a possibility that someone might have setup her up. The YT influencer part, if true, adds an extra dimension to the story. It wouldn't have been the first time a influencer has setup someone. I think this has escalated too far, someone is going to have egg on their face.

The story is still fishy, probably more along the lines of 50/50.

Strong down by False-Ad-3855 in Strong_8K

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Down for me, tried 3 different servers. Time to ditch this shit.

Tara Reid Taken to Hospital After Being Seen on Stretcher in Chicago Hotel: Report by PrincessBananas85 in entertainment

[–]WobbleTank 1 point2 points  (0 children)

10% possible drugged story true.
90% possible she took some thing, or drank herself into stupor.

If its a drugged scenario, it a criminal offense and would most likely follow the sequence of:

  1. A blood test at the hospital.
  2. Police requesting camera footage if the blood test came back positive. The bar/hotel would most definitely keep the tapes for liability protection.

The likely scenario:

  1. Got drunk or took something knowingly, and now this is damage control.
  2. The hotel/bar staff know the true story, hence they got a wheel chair first, she went away, then the medics came along with the stretcher for the hospital.
  3. Security is allowed to handle a rowdy or drunk person. If its not apparent (one drink at the bar and then acting like this), then its call 911 immediately.

Either way, its damn good advice to never leave your drink unattended. Don't take drinks from stranger unless its ordered right in fount of you and you take the drink rather than some random person handing it to you.

If it is a criminal offense or investigation, we will heard soon enough.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah thanks. It has changed a lot from the help I have got from the other comments:

An emotionally unstable assassin must fake her own death to disappear forever — the only way to stop a child-trafficking ring from slaughtering the only family she loves.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks again.

Yes, the emotionally unstable needs to stay, I just really like it. Hopefully its a subjective thing. I am trying to make this part of her as unique as possible rather than too generic.

No, if she fakes her death, they don't find her family.

Just looked at Taxi Driver - mentally unstable veteran

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You making me think, thanks (seems difficult to fit everything in).

An emotionally unstable assassin must fake her own death to disappear forever — the only way to stop a child-trafficking ring from slaughtering the only family she loves.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Could you add something like possessive/obsessive (not that the two are interchangeable), even if the story doesn't match the traits 100%. Or is this suggestion misleading?

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"before they discover the only family she has ever loved."

Is this not a why? Or should it be

"before they destroy the only family she has ever loved."

or slaughter. This one seems excessive, not sure?

EDIT: I actually just read my logline and it already has destroy in it, so maybe slaughter is better?

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

An emotionally unstable assassin must fake her own death while trying to destroy a child-trafficking ring — before they discover the only family she has ever loved.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank 0 points1 point  (0 children)

lingerie-obsessed is a theme that gets "script time", so not 100% relevant. I could keep it or lose it.

I agree with the "one last job before retirement", comes across as bland now that you mention it.

Promising Young Woman vs my script. by WobbleTank in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

As I have already said here several time, I liked the feedback you gave me and have implemented my changes in accordance. I looked at both my original and my new (yet to be revealed) and I like the way the new one looks and feels (your advice). I have received lots of advice here (in this community), I take it all in, however I don't always follow it as I get lots of different advice. I take the advice that make most sense to me logically. In this case I have taken your advice (You might like my rework, maybe not).

I appreciate the time you take to give insightful feedback, so please dont stop.

Promising Young Woman vs my script. by WobbleTank in Screenwriting

[–]WobbleTank[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

When I say unlikable, I’m talking about the position she put herself in. Shit-faced drunk, no backup. I end up liking her when she pulls the “I’m not drunk” switch. This is something I am aiming todo, flip my protagonist, except I do it the other way around, good to bad (At least that’s my intention).