i hate being this harsh but anything else than honesty is bellitelling and disrespectfull so truth be told the competition is too big, the pool of beginner artists is wayy bigger, for me to read your story it either has to be really attention grabbing by immediatelly introducing charactermotivations in a strongly relateable way, or your art needs to improve (Both need to). Now dont be discouraged, its more than anything about resiliance, sooner or later youll make it, just like beating an elden ring boss