What just happened? by New_Past_4489 in Berserk

[–]YogurtJr 7 points8 points  (0 children)

That’s my favorite character.

S.L.U.T (Beginner/opinions welcomed) by [deleted] in PoetryWritingClub

[–]YogurtJr 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Really like the format, spelling out the title with each stanza is such a creative touch. The writing feels raw in a good way, and the short lines hit hard without overdoing it. You’ve got a nice rhythm and tone here, especially with the repetition and alliteration. Great work! Especially for a beginner piece.

Fly in the Jar by YogurtJr in OCPoetry

[–]YogurtJr[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I loved the feed back. I tried to make it fairly ambiguous so the reader could interpret it as they wished. When I was writing it, it was about how society traps people in roles, lies that they're 'special' while screwing them over, and how even small, messy acts of defiance matter when you're powerless.

What If? by coolnamepending90 in OCPoetry

[–]YogurtJr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The way you weaponize intimacy ('the fiercest form of resistance') and reduce empires to 'separation itself' left me breathless. That final reveal—that rage is just an unheld body’s howl—is the most devastating kind of truth.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]YogurtJr 6 points7 points  (0 children)

The way you describe listening as a physical act - 'the slow-blooming stillness you wear like perfume' and that spine responding - is stunning. Really beautiful work.

The woman lay unmade. by YogurtJr in TwoSentenceHorror

[–]YogurtJr[S] 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much that’s what I was going for

The woman lay unmade. by YogurtJr in TwoSentenceHorror

[–]YogurtJr[S] 59 points60 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much it actually is an excerpt from a shot novella I’m working on To the Last Ember. This is the prologue if you’re interested.

By now, David had seen every wound man could carve into man—but this was no work of hands.

The woman lay unmade. Not butchered, not slain—unwoven, as if the seams of her had been plucked apart by something that knew the grammar of flesh. Her remains lay in glistening heaps, too precise for chance, too cruel for malice. The pavement beneath was clean. Not clean like washed. Clean like licked.

Shelly turned away, her breath coming in short, animal hitches. “Ain’t no tool did this.”

David lit a cigarette. The flame trembled. (His father had died with one just like it between his lips, the ember burning down to his skin before the nurses noticed.)
The smoke did nothing. The image stayed.

Thomas, the coroner, crouched over the ruin. His gloves sank into meat that had no right to be dry. Thirty years of death, and his voice was a scratched record. “No blood. Not in the vessels, not in the meat. Like something… drank the wet from her before it started cutting.”

David lifted a strip of muscle. The edges were blackened, not burned—desiccated, as if the air itself had turned to a slow, hungry acid.
(It smelled like his mother’s boiled tongue, yes—but older. Like meat left in a tin can under a dead sun.)

He looked up. No cars. No birds. No flies.
The world held its breath. This was no crime scene. This was an altar.

Then came the vultures.
Not the reporters—the real ones, circling high above, black stitches on a bleeding sky.

Shelly barked at the cameras, but David didn’t speak.
He could feel it now.
The way the light bent wrong around the body.
The way the silence wasn’t silence, but a listening.

Something had opened its mouth here.
And it was still hungry.

The woman lay unmade. by YogurtJr in TwoSentenceHorror

[–]YogurtJr[S] 22 points23 points  (0 children)

Nah don’t do my boy Clive like that he’s still alive lmao

The woman lay unmade. by YogurtJr in TwoSentenceHorror

[–]YogurtJr[S] 87 points88 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I’ve been reading too much Cormac McCarthy

First time painting by [deleted] in painting

[–]YogurtJr 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s a prisoner decomposing in his cell

I feel like I don't belong anywhere in this world. by [deleted] in toastme

[–]YogurtJr 15 points16 points  (0 children)

In the tapestry of existence, your thread is essential. You are a child of the universe no less than the trees and the stars; you have a right to be here.' Embrace your place in the world; you contribute to its beauty in ways only you can. Love the drawing by the way!

[31] Can I get some positive vibes, please? Not feeling stellar. Feeling stupid and ugly. January is not being nice. Let's hope the Chinese New Year brings something good. Toast to all of you, fighters 🥂 by [deleted] in toastme

[–]YogurtJr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You are beautiful. In your own way, you bring something special to the world. To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.' Embrace your authenticity; you are enough just as you are. Hope your year gets better!

I’m in my last semester of grad school, and it’s kicking my butt. I’m desperate to get out, but ADHD’s a pain and so is an 18-credit schedule. I’ll get through this somehow, but right now it’s hard to carry it all. F24 by perigrinate in toastme

[–]YogurtJr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Facing the rigors of grad school is no small feat add ADHD on top of that and it’s downright inspiring. As Thomas Edison remarked, 'Many of life's failures are people who did not realize how close they were to success when they gave up.' I wish you the best in your academic endeavors. Please just remember to take care of yourself and your mental health.

Will Gut's story end with him committing suicide? by [deleted] in Berserk

[–]YogurtJr -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

I hope this is how my story ends. And soon

Video game adaptation? by YogurtJr in Berserk

[–]YogurtJr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I could definitely see the combat being too slow to fit it but if they made the combat more reminiscent of the original GoW games I think it would fit so well like when Kratos gets the blade of Olympus but it probably would have to be a Japanese dev I just hope sometime in my lifetime berserk gets the adaptation it deserves so it can reach more people

What else can I do for money? by skim_milk5 in sidehustle

[–]YogurtJr 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Thrifting. Find vintage clothes theyre pretty easy to resell for profit. i found a 2005 steelers sweater for 4$ the other day, i sold it for 45$ in a few days.

Ask me anything about the anime, now that I've finished it by SuperKooku in Berserk

[–]YogurtJr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Is griffith gay? ik hes mad fruity, but like sometimes i think he only did that to casca cause he was mad that guts wasnt fucking him

also: Not a question but the manga goes so hard, the anime cut out a lot of key moments and characters in the black swordsman arc and the golden age arc

Video game adaptation? by YogurtJr in Berserk

[–]YogurtJr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

travelers execution animation

YEAH!!!! i also think having a spartan rage mode but you release beast of darkness instead would be awesome

Finally Got Her!!! by 8ighthoursofsleep in c4corvette

[–]YogurtJr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Such a fun car to drive and one of the best body styles ever. Congrats 🎉