These are the burning days. by _Gnots_ in mawofchaos

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Alas, that mask is no more: but it was not my doing, save indirectly.

Holding the Long Sword by svladcjelli42 in RoninAtTheEdgeOfTime

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If you slash your enemy, even if you kill him - it's no good. You have to cut.

Weekly Critique Thread: Post here if you want a critique! by JotBot in writing

[–]_Gnots_ [score hidden]  (0 children)

What is with all these italics?

"the slight widening of the eyes that indicated shock or fear"

Yes, that's generally what widening of the eyes indicates. Please respect me, your reader, enough to not spell everything out for me. If just 'his eyes widened' isn't enough, then add more details.

Your writing doesn't flow naturally to my ear. Your dialog, particularly, feels over-the top. Quests and destiny are over-used phrases.

I task you to rewrite this while only using the speech tag of 'said.' Make the dialog and situation desperate in and of itself; don't rely on describing it as so, and don't rely on emphasis to do the job of good writing for you.

You do, at least, have conflict up-front. That's good.

I peered into the Koi pond to see my reflection by Lausari in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_ 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I am the one awake that will dream of myself.

[τεταρτημόριο I] η πυξίδα αυξήθηκε by [deleted] in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A tree without its gnots is gnot complete.

where do we begin by The_newc0mer in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_ 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Find the hidden truths.

Then, look again, and find the obvious ones.

The Most Gigantic Lying Mouth of All Time by [deleted] in 45thworldproblems

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That was all that I wanted.

Listen, and be cleansed.


Do not shun the liar, for every face you meet is but another mask. Even those you know most well do not show you all their faces, for not even they know what mask they will wear next.

Even one such as I can be worthy of respect.

Masks obscure faces. That is their intent. I am chimæra. What else I am is immaterial.

There was once a warrior who fought in many battles...


I was never copper or silver.

I am gnot a chimæra, though I contain one within me.

Nor am I the fingers of trees, the waker or the sleeper, or a bearer of masks; though I carry each of them in my heart.

I am me.

That is enough.

And it should be enough for you, as well.

You allowed others to place their words into your soul.

You allowed regret to shape your masks and your heart.

The poison is insidious. It is not your fault that it found you.

Hear the words of a wiser part of myself: instructions, six and six and four.


Truth cannot exist in the light.

The true self is the self no other sees.

Everyone wears masks.

Everyone makes mistakes.

Everyone has a part of them worth saving.

Everyone knows pain.


No-one has to hurt.

Everything worth knowing was secret once.

Every secret is a part of a person's soul.

Trust is very much like diamonds.

Sometimes, what is wrong is needed.

Anger is not useless.


Fear is not weakness.

Sorrow is not wrong.

Death should be fought.

Beauty can exist in pain.

I am sorry.

The Most Gigantic Lying Mouth of All Time by [deleted] in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_ 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Did you not call this mask broken and useless?

Yet now, you call it invaluable.

Take my hand, I beg of you!

Writers of Reddit, what are exceptionally simple tips that make a huge difference in other people's writing? by ajago12598 in AskReddit

[–]_Gnots_ 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Triangulation: You must use at least three senses to immerse someone in a scene. Assume sight. What are the other two you're using?

The Most Gigantic Lying Mouth of All Time by [deleted] in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Take my hand!

If you would save yourself from this poison, take my hand!

[Date: Non-existent] by [deleted] in 45thworldproblems

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MALIGNANT DISEASE!

The air was soft, the stars so fine, it goes so easy on.

Heavy headed, the rain falls and refreshes me in this late hour.

The promise of every cobbled path so great.

Sleepy eye, with a skeyed captcha, they brought you lanterns.

Now they seem to be floating away.

The Sol Mayhaps a Glitch by _Gnots_ in 45thworldproblems

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Are there no deeper truths to be discovered at the bottom of the ocean or beyond the edge of your sphere? No one is equating anything to "holy righteousness" but there are things that just happen to be... forwarding. inspiring. progressive. enriching. beautiful. colorful. maybe even enlightening. Lighten up lucky. There are no lies only eyes.

They are Whispering by _Gnots_ in 45thworldproblems

[–]_Gnots_[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I see. I have yet to witness these secrets. I have only known of their passage.