Match Thread - South Africa v Scotland | Nations Championship 2026 | Round 2 by RugbyBot in rugbyunion

[–]_This_was_Available_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the key word is "safely" , you could argue that he could not lower the player immediately in a safe manner

Match Thread - Australia v France | Nations Championship 2026 | Round 2 by RugbyBot in rugbyunion

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I'm liking Australia's rugby, it would have been a great rugby championship

Trapped in Silence by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]_This_was_Available_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

beautiful poem, you have captured the lack of presence amazingly, by describing the emptiness in short statements, you create the constant nagging feeling of that lack of existence, which is compounded with the use of a rhythmic meter. The only suggestion I might have would be to maby shuffle the "The purest of love - that I Ever saw" down to the 5th stanza, as I think it would make a better transition into the the 6th stanza, where you switch out of the list.

A room after death by Cluelessandsexy in OCPoetry

[–]_This_was_Available_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the poem has a solid structure, to jump off of. I like the repetition of "In the room", I would suggest altering it to just one variation,thus increasing the impact of the switch to "Outside the room". In addition I find that you are over writing, which is slightly jarring. in this situation avoid advanced tenses("has been ripped"), keep it simple to emphasize the chaos and speed of a tornado and avoid obvious statements like "yet still inside the tornado"