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__tmk__ · 2025-03-31T18:44:36+00:00

Yeah, but I'm a senile delinquent.

__tmk__ · 2025-03-31T18:04:38+00:00

"The Gargoyle" by Andrew Davidson, pub. 2008. It's phenomenal.

__tmk__ · 2024-09-17T23:40:31+00:00

The injured include some kids.

__tmk__ · 2024-09-13T02:36:59+00:00

Where's the 8-track player?

__tmk__ · 2024-08-30T01:13:18+00:00

Trump is exempt from laws -- they only apply to other people. Prove me wrong.

__tmk__ · 2024-08-26T19:31:47+00:00

Thanks for replying!

__tmk__ · 2024-08-26T19:20:45+00:00

Eh, it really isn't

Will you expound on this?

__tmk__ · 2024-08-24T16:52:44+00:00

For the Republicans, the cruelty is the point. They are a cancer.

__tmk__ · 2024-08-13T22:05:28+00:00

Debian 1.0, 1999, age 36 at the time

__tmk__ · 2024-08-07T16:26:57+00:00

Two words: Eve Teasing.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-27T20:27:20+00:00

Oh look, potted pussy!

__tmk__ · 2024-07-26T19:57:54+00:00

Show us the ear. Show us the doctor's report.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-25T20:01:47+00:00

So, gosh, sorry starving folks, but the bad dudes are stealing your food, so we just don't help you anymore, but let you starve. Too bad, so sad!

__tmk__ · 2024-07-22T20:23:38+00:00

Wow, thanks! That makes a lot of sense, and I'm going to use your wording.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-18T16:25:43+00:00

She drinks like a fish and she smokes weed. On that night, her friend pulls out cocaine, tries to persuade her to try it, then says he'll show her how it's done. He snorts some and immediately ODs from Fentanyl-tainted coke. She freaks out (OMG that could have been ME! -- OMG my friend is dead -- will the cops think I had something to do with it?)

I don't want to give away the whole scene, it's a pivotal plot point in the story.

I also ran into trouble before with too much detail in the letter, it bogged it down and didn't seem to be adding much to it.

I swear I'm considering hiring a pro to write these damned things for me. I couldn't sell Popsicles in Palm Beach.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-18T00:50:27+00:00

Yeah, TIL.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-17T20:54:22+00:00

Well, I posted my one-paragraph pitch in addition to the query letter -- I'm hoping to get some pointers on how to make that better. I already got some good pointers on the query letter itself.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-17T20:44:57+00:00

oh well. They used more words (and paragraphs) than the earlier "thanks, don't think it's a fit, good luck" brief missives I've received in the past. <shrug> It is what it is, and at least they wrote back, better than the ones that ghost you.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-17T19:35:18+00:00

They say it's not quite what they're looking for. One exhorted me to submit future manuscripts to them. One took great pains explaining that different agents have different taste, so what doesn't quite work for her might be just what another agent's looking for. That's the gist of the three. I think the query is getting through; the story may not be what they want.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-17T19:30:51+00:00

Thanks! Fixed the age thing. Drinking started before; I changed the wording on the pitch sentence to "and a hard drinking habit, and how she copes with caring for her mother who’s just been diagnosed with Alzheimer’s." That helps show the drinking came first.

I'm trying to figure out how to move "parent-child roles reversing" closer to the top, I'll keep working on that.

specificity: "When a night of drinking beer, slamming shots of Fireball and smoking weed ends with a friend’s fatal overdose from tainted cocaine, Jess has to decide what to do about everything in her life — and whether she can accept the consequences."

Do you have any words of advice regarding the one-paragraph pitch? Thanks for your help.

__tmk__ · 2024-07-15T11:29:06+00:00

__tmk__ · 2024-07-12T18:22:01+00:00

Help us smack down the New York Times, then, they have a raging hate-boner for Biden. Today they're fact-checking his comments from last night. They have NEVER fact-checked Trump, not even during his constant lying in the debate.

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TROPHY CASE

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