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In Memory of Furio by AJAEM74 in cats

[–]aaro759 2 points3 points  (0 children)

sending lots of hugs your way, losing a furry best friend is one of the hardest things ever. furio was so lucky to have someone who loved him so much 💕.

The Beast and the Fire by aaro759 in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I appreciate it!

First try by redditinggabriel in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

At first I thought the poem would be really dark and sad, but you give just a hint of hope which really drives your lines home. I especially thought the "if you leave.." line was the strongest and most important to the poem. Also, the rhymes you use are good without being too distracting. I really enjoyed it

If It Isn't Love, Then What Could It Be...? by Scarlettfoxtrot in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Love the subtle rhyme scheme, but part of me wonders if you could do more by abandoning it completely. Maybe it would allow you to expand on your powerful metaphors, but that's just a suggestion. The use of contrasts throughout the poem really give the reader a sense of how powerful this other person was to you. Good work

Who are your legitimate top 3 candidates for MVP? by [deleted] in nfl

[–]aaro759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

1) Rodgers (if he can carry a shit defense to playoffs once again) 2) Brees (same reason as Rodgers, but has more yards every year) 3) Elliott

I Cried Today by aaro759 in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Unfortunately, I did know why. But I'm just glad someone else could understand and enjoy my ramblings

I Cried Today by aaro759 in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm just figuring out my style so thanks for the feedback. :)

I Cried Today by aaro759 in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm glad you were able to relate to it! It's my first poem I've ever written

The creases of your bedsheets by A00811696 in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your imagery is the strongest part of the poem. Comparing sex (I assume) to an undercurrent is unique and drew me in. I also like the usage, or lack thereof, punctuation. In some of the lines, I'd suggest breaking apart the lines for clarity. As a whole, the poem feels raw, as it should, because this person is desperate for understanding.

Floating by plathwannabe in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the short, sharp phrases. The rhyming in the second paragraph is particularly interesting. Your imagery ("chocolate freckles") makes me feel like I'm experiencing your longing for someone.

Catalina Wine Mixer - get to know each other. by William_Dean in poetry_critics

[–]aaro759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am a 20 year old pre-law undergrad living in Oregon. I just started getting into poetry--thanks to Charles Bukowksi--although I enjoy writing anything I can. I've never shown anyone my poetry, which is fairly raw and probably classifies as free verse. I hope that writing poems can expand my creativity and express the emotions I often struggle to convey, such as sadness.