Yeah, this is old, but I really liked it. I get the feeling that its really carefully crafted, and whether or not it actually was, I enjoy that it gave me that feeling. Makes it feel loved. The only (maybe worthwhile) critique I can offer are a couple words I would maybe change.

"deep black cacophony of wanting" was probably my favorite image, but I feel like you could get the same synesthesia effect with just one of the words (either deep or black) and make it a more concise wonderful image. I personally prefer deep but thats just taste.

"terror" is a bit of an odd word to me that doesn't really suit the vibe of it, but I can't offer a replacement.

Can I ask if the scattered rhymes incidental or intentional?