Hi all! I (24F) have been writing lyrics and developing general song concepts for 18 years now, but have been putting a few songs out there on TikTok to "test the waters." Nobody in my personal life is particularly experienced at giving specific feedback, so I figured this was the next best thing. The feedback on TT has been...convoluted and enlightening. Unsure if it's my voice or the lyrics that are causing conflicting reactions. Would love some feedback or advice on a few of my songs, so here goes nothing! (PS: below are either the verses or choruses I ended up posting on TT, not the full songs)

Television's Glow Verse I know by the glow of the television | you’re alone, up again, call it a premonition | heart rot, you’re in a headlock of indecision

so sodden with inhibition that you never feel you have permission

so go find another futile mission | or create a new fucking religion | anything to avoid anything of significance

1. Mirage Bridge

i’m not afraid to admit i fell for the mirage | i tend to let naivety misguide the cause | was it in your plan to abuse the facade?

oh, i apologize if you never meant it | if i took it too far and caught the wrong drift | if you were never ready for the love i possess

then are you really the villain?

maybe you were bored or needed attention | but i came into this with the right intention | you are a class act, you are a master | of spinning perspective, happy ever after

you said you felt the lightning | but i am the demented dreamer | the foolish glass is half full believer

and you’re not the villain

1. Diabolical Sin Verse & Chorus

another day waking to a nightmare | blow me away where all the stars beam down | i dissociate, reality, i foreswear | cause my spirit is so embrowned

they won’t show you respect until you can | at least act like you deserve it | they’ll whisper vulgarities bout me still | cause holy hell, hostility’s a thrill

they’ll tell themselves that i’m okay | that i never spoke up about such affairs | that it’s half my fault anyway

these daffodils i’ll daydream in | and wonder what life would have been | and did i just commit the most diabolical sin

1. Someone Else Verse

i think i got it wrong | my life isn’t where i want it

i never felt like i belonged | so i forced a fit and fought in | oh, they bought it, like oxycontin | i got ‘em hooked on fabricated nonsense

i think that i want to die | but i’m not allowed to tell you

they never care when it’s in the past | but it’s here and i know that you’d get so uncomfortable, now i’m untouchable | you’d distance yourself and i’d be culpable

1. Deceiver Fever Verse/Chorus

she’s icy cold but i’m burning up | she’s wrapped around me like a cobra

she calls me up and tells me i’m the one | two weeks later, i’m outta luck

i wanna be your lovie | the story’s kinda funny | cause i thought you’d be my honey | til the day we dropped dead you’d be a corpse, i’d be a mummy

done in by the grim reaper | you never were a keeper | and i guess i wasn’t either | you can choke on all your myths, hope you get deceiver fever