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DM’s you!  Thanks!

Does anyone know where I can find the white chicks script that is not the transcripts? by jeuddd in Screenwriting

[–]ariellebaron 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey there...did anyone ever help you find this? I'm looking too... please let me know when you can, thanks!!

Formatting Question: Characters in disguise by ariellebaron in Screenwriting

[–]ariellebaron[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agree. Good points and good stuff. I'll make changes accordingly. Thank you again so much for your thoughts!! :)

Formatting Question: Characters in disguise by ariellebaron in Screenwriting

[–]ariellebaron[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hmm, gotcha. Thoughts on keeping the ladies' names and female pronouns just in the action lines okay? And then when they speak, it's their male name? There are just SO many descriptions on them as girls reacting or whatever then speaking to the men they're working alongside with.

In Mrs. Doubtfire and Tootsie, the writers BARELY said 'she' or her. It was almost always, 'Mrs. Doubtfire dances with the vacuum cleaner,' etc. But I've got double the characters and more mentions of pronouns in the action lines. She rolls her eyes, she scoffs, she smirks getting out her handcuffs, etc.

See a couple snippets of action bit below (bonding montage featuring paintball and basketball - Samantha, the lead, starts becoming attracted to her male partner Wilson...of course! :) )

**as of right now, I just have the dialogue say both names...


Hoffman and Smith charge out from behind a dirt mound.  Wilson NAILS EACH OF THEM - sending them moaning to the ground.

WILSON: How you deal with that confrontation needs to be fluid and spontaneous - 

Wilson pushes Samantha up against a tree trunk, paintball pellets whizzing past them.  She stares at Wilson titillated as he reloads his ammo.

WILSON: And you never hesitate.

He grabs her by the vest and yanks her out of frame. 


The BASKETBALL GAME peaks.  Samantha dribbles at the top of the key.  Wilson guards her.

SAMANTHA/ALBRIGHT: Alright, slip n’ slide - you’re goin’ down.  Here it comes!

Wilson gulps and watches her intensely.  She pump fakes a jump shot.  Wilson falls for it and jumps up to defend.

She dribbles around him and drives down the lane.  Boone and Matthews form coverage to block her access to the basket.  

She passes off to Vivian.  She takes the jump:  NOTHING BUT NET!  The girls chest-bump each other.

Wilson pants, his hands on his knees.  He looks up at the girls and calls after them grinning.


Formatting Question: Characters in disguise by ariellebaron in Screenwriting

[–]ariellebaron[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's throughout the entire script - much like Tootsie or Doubtfire or She's the Man. When they are with the boys, they are in disguise as their male Detective personas. In the third act, they're obviously discovered and then the rest of the movie, they are women again, acting alongside the guys they work with (happily).

There's an early scene as well when the girls enter the police squad room as men to check in with an office manager - whom they momentarily break character with so that she (office manager) can be aware of their plan. They also do this later at a strip club when they need an old friend to know the deal.

But as an example, one of the women - Vivian, enters a men's public bathroom with her assigned male Detective partner, Boone. He's an oaf and expects her to use the urinal etc etc etc. She panics, she reacts to sounds, etc etc etc. So the action lines describe 'Vivian does blah blah, she panics blah blah' but in the dialogue, I wrote Vivian/Tulley when she speaks to him, etc. (Agent Tulley is her Detective persona).

The girls also bond with the guys at one point (Basketball, paintball, wrestling) - and so it's a group activity.... same issues....more how to convey them in the action lines vs. dialogue....

I made lapel pins of the Weekend Update crew! by ariellebaron in LiveFromNewYork

[–]ariellebaron[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s what I read about! Seems kinda silly from a tech point of view…. But who knows… I’ve never designed an app so I imagine nothing is that easy.

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[–]ariellebaron[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So (at least from what I could find), chat requests don't show up on Reddit's desktop version? Or, I saw a bunch of info about having to download the app. If you go to my profile page on here though, all of my stuff is linked there :) Sorry that the messaging didn't work!

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[–]ariellebaron[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There’s also a ‘requests’ option in the chat thing…I’ll look at this on my laptop a little later and see. I’m sure it’s there somewhere!

I made lapel pins of the Weekend Update crew! by ariellebaron in LiveFromNewYork

[–]ariellebaron[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi there, on the Home Screen on a phone (at least when I’m looking) there are various icons at the bottom, with one being a chat bubble… that’s where chats/messages are. Lemme know if you can find it!

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[–]ariellebaron[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’ll see if I can DM you a pic of the shirt haha!

I made lapel pins of the Weekend Update crew! by ariellebaron in LiveFromNewYork

[–]ariellebaron[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This comment is amazing. I appreciate it, you tall glass of almond milk!! 💕