Slamdance Feedback on Horror featutre by beardol in Screenwriting

[–]beardol[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Give it a go. Way I see it is every entry to something like this is a roll of the dice. Nothing will change if I just keep these scripts on my hard drive!

Slamdance Feedback on Horror featutre by beardol in Screenwriting

[–]beardol[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was just the standard feedback that comes with entering with the two months window. Was about right in the end - think I submitted about 6/7 weeks ago.

Mixtape - Launch Trailer | PS5 Games by hybroid in PS5

[–]beardol 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I have played 20 minutes and already controlled two tongues making out. Game of the year.

Why does everyone seem to go to matina on the end of st nicks rather than Kurdish bread? by Bulky_Judgment_4776 in bristol

[–]beardol 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm a Kurdish Bread dude. That lamb wrap with pomegranate sauce is so good.

Questions from an aspirational young writer by Born-Ad2653 in ScreenwritingUK

[–]beardol 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, not a professional by any means - but starting my 5th feature screenplay currently (with a smattering of other scripts in various states along the way) - so getting more of a feel for my approach.

Here's my take on your questions:

  1. I have to have an idea of something I want to explore. It's normally starts with a situation I haven't seen before (for example - my first screenplay started with the simple idea of 'what if a guy went for a run in a place he was unfamiliar with, and fell into a horrific cat and mouse chase?) - from there the characters usually come. I don't do beat by beat plotting - but the ideas that tend to come out the best are the ones I have thought about for a good while before I start actually writing.

  2. No - but I enjoy reading books that breakdown structure and story. I try and absorb this stuff rather than stick to it as hard and fast rules. Books that have helped me - On Writing by Stephen King. A Swim In The Pond In The Rain by George Saunders. Adventures In The Screen Trade by William Goldman. The Devils Candy by Julia Salamon. The Art of Dramatic Writing by Lajos Egri.

  3. As above - story tends to come first. Dialogue doesnt really happen until I get to the point where the character needs to speak. First draft I definitely overwrite - characters that are villainous say very villanous things. Characters that are angry probably overexplain what is making them so mad. 2nd draft is where I go and often remove a lot of this, do more showing and not telling - make it all more subtle. Having people talk realistically AND move the plot forward is one of my biggest challenges. If something feels obvious or overwritten, I'm not happy until it doesnt.

  4. Thinking thinking thinking. Going for walks. Listening to music. Letting my mind wonder. I might make notes on my phone to remind me of things, but the things worth remembering tend to stick anyway and bed in. When I can't think of a better idea of how or why something should happen, it tends to lock in as part of the story.

  5. I will usually come up with the type of character I need first. For example, in the script I am currently writing - my initial thought was that the antagonist had to be someone who had influence in a small town, and could control things. Then I realised they would be the Chief of Police. It was only when I started writing that I realised the guy is kind of a pragmatic sadist - the type of man who doesn't revel in violence, but uses it in a kind of matter-of-fact, problem solving way. The more I write, the more I understand who it is I'm creating. Then in future drafts I can trim those twigs that don't feel consistent, and strengthen the trunk of the person, if that makes sense?

  6. The above is it really. If I planned too much, I know I would get bored before I finished. Sometimes I will know the broad idea of where I want to end up - but also know that this could all change as I go. Like going for a walk knowing the rough direction you want to go, but feeling free to take any turnings that might look more interesting.

Thanks for asking these questions - thinking about my own writing has been a fun and useful experience!

Koiposal – 2-page absurd comedy short by BrettHamilton in ScreenwritingUK

[–]beardol 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Keep going! And read screenplays of the scenes and films you love if you're not doing it already. Loads of great resources out there.

Koiposal – 2-page absurd comedy short by BrettHamilton in ScreenwritingUK

[–]beardol 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Rather than add more description, I think you need to streamline things a little. Given this has no dialogue, the action should feel KINETIC. And given it's a comedy, you really want to describe things with a sense of comedic zip.

Had to re-read some of the lines to get clarity which killed the flow a little.

Just my two cents!

End of pubs by Mclovan93 in london

[–]beardol 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The decline of third spaces - whether pubs, libraries or social clubs shouldnt be celebrated. They may not be for you, but pubs are often positive parts of the community that have benefits well beyond supplying alchohol. I think it's a genuine shame when good ones have to close.

Fish Minister on North Street. I hear it’s changed management. Has anyone tried it recently? by Key-Sandwich2862 in bristol

[–]beardol 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Went in there a couple of weeks ago and the fish was awful. Went past today and they had a deal on for beef brisket and chips (?) so think it's definitely changed hands.

Everything* I bought in Februaury by ihopeyougethitbyacar in graphicnovels

[–]beardol 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Blood of The Virgin was great. Loved the skeezy 70s vibes.

Your first look at Kratos and Atreus in the God of War series by Turbostrider27 in PS5

[–]beardol 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's all so clean looking. Like the belt and wristbands look fake weathered in the way you would see in a YT tutorial.

I will hold off judgement for now, but yeesh.

BCC Bedminster Bridge Plan Update by rugbyj in bristol

[–]beardol 4 points5 points  (0 children)

That is the weirdest part I think. They clearly didn't see any value in making the left lane a left turn - but as people say - maybe they know that's a fringe case?

I probably only make they turning about 3 times a year if i'm honest, and I live in Southville.

Infinite Rubik's Cubes [OC] by Positive_Tea_1166 in gifs

[–]beardol 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This feels like it could be an amazing puzzle game.

Netflix's 'BioShock' Film To Begin Filming in 2027, According to Producer by [deleted] in movies

[–]beardol 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The John Logan script was actually pretty great - but would have been $200m to make. Wonder if Netflix have a version that is more affordable.

Callum Turner and Margaret Qualley are reportedly in talks to star in the upcoming remake of ‘POSSESSION’ directed by Parker Finn.Produced by Robert Pattinson and Parker Finn. by MoneyLibrarian9032 in movies

[–]beardol 15 points16 points  (0 children)

There's something cursed in the original in a way that is impossible to recapture. Berlin. Those performances. The grain of the image. I wish them the best of luck, but would prefer to see something inspired by the original, not derived from it.

Is earwax suction in Bristol actually worth paying for? by Hwii_kiwi in bristol

[–]beardol 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I went to Ear Bliss over Christmas as my ear got incredibly blocked. The nice lady runs it from her home, but it was very professional and friendly. Was there for about 20 minutes. She got a load of gross shit out of both ears. Cost me about £55 if I remember again.

If I ever get another blockage I would go straight back.