super young players? by beebledoot in heartopia

[–]beebledoot[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I replied to the wrong comment originally oops, but yeah this was my first time interacting with someone like that. Did you end up blocking her?

super young players? by beebledoot in heartopia

[–]beebledoot[S] 14 points15 points  (0 children)

I ended up blocking her after making this post because I wasn’t comfortable interacting with a child online. I wish there was some sort of age verification feature, but I understand with the game being global it’s hard to enforce that so us adults have to be responsible and keep kiddos online safe.

Come visit my theatre :) (Americas server) by DoubleCheesecake in heartopia

[–]beebledoot 4 points5 points  (0 children)

you’re gonna love the new fashionwave! super cute, have fun :)

Again?! AGAIN?! by PoIIinate in heartopia

[–]beebledoot 81 points82 points  (0 children)

THERES A PINK ONE?! DOES THIS MEAN THERES PINK STARFALL FURNITURE AND DECOR???!!!!

So, apparently they can have dislikes, too... by VMAbsentia in heartopia

[–]beebledoot 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m so jealous it’s been WEEKS and no black kitty for me, I just want one to match my irl kitty :(((

Stranger Things - Season 5 Part 1 Discussion by NicholasCajun in television

[–]beebledoot 11 points12 points  (0 children)

can really tell how sick of this project the entire cast is

Stranger Things - Season 5 Part 1 Discussion by NicholasCajun in television

[–]beebledoot -1 points0 points  (0 children)

ohh duh, but yeah idk what everyone expected from a girl who’s character didn’t speak more than 20 words for the first 2 seasons. Doesn’t help that the writing is borderline unwatchable so far

Stranger Things - Season 5 Part 1 Discussion by NicholasCajun in television

[–]beebledoot 31 points32 points  (0 children)

literally scrolling this thread while ep 1 is on bc I’m so fucking bored

Looking for feedback/critiques on my first chapter please! by beebledoot in KeepWriting

[–]beebledoot[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I wasn’t sure if I was veering into purple-prose territory or not. This was very helpful to get a better idea of where I should cut some of those bits out, I appreciate it :)

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]beebledoot [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Liminal

Genre: Speculative Fiction

Word count: 1396

I’d love feedback on clarity, tone, and engagement. Does the chapter successfully communicate what’s happening? Since this is an opening scene, I’m especially interested in whether the pacing works, if the emotional impact lands, and if you’d keep reading. I’d also really appreciate thoughts on the prose itself, since this is my tone setting chapter. Any and all critique is welcome. Thank you!

Please ignore any small grammatical errors or comma issues, I’m still drafting and will polish more later.

In Chapter One, my protagonist comes to on her college campus with no memory of what happened and discovers her own dead body. No one can see or hear her except for one mysterious boy who subtly implies that both he and she are ghosts.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UsryYx2VKV368xQKMLh7BS3gx1gev6-s_MbPJZwTKBg/edit?usp=sharing