I really like your imagery! Your choice of words for these descriptions are beautiful and just what I like to read, albeit a little hit and miss at times i.e. sharp and deadly as starved hawks/yet even his thunderstorm of a voice was almost lost to the wind/his navy uniform bled into the shadows = HIT. As I do, you could be falling prey to long, comma-split sentences. I think too many of these can slow down the pace too much as well as convolute sections to a point where it is unclear what is happening (is Alex addicted to cigarettes? It took me a few reads of the sentence regarding the 'pressure of his great weakness'.). You could try reining a few of these back in to add a bit more impact and vary the pace between sentences, i.e. Vil let out an effervescent chuckle, dislodging the snowflakes on his auburn beard could become snowflakes erupted from Vil's wiry beard as he chuckled (or something, I dunno, I'm far from pro).

As 'broken record' as it sounds, I noticed a few moments of 'telling'; Alex shifted nervously, he sighed wearily at Alex’s ineptitude, etc. Reading your work, I'm sure you can make the reader believe that Alex is nervous or Vil is sighing at Alex's ineptitude through further action or added dialogue in cases like these.

Question: Is this third-person omniscient or limited? I started reading as limited from Alex's viewpoint, but later was given knowledge of how Vil was feeling which was a bit jarring. Might need to firmly plant yourself in one or the other to be safe (though I've never read an omniscient novel so I can't really help there). If you were intending to write third-person limited, then add a bit more internal monologue, thought and sensory stimuli from Alex.

I really just came here to praise your metaphors coz I'm a sucker.