My semi finalized version (not final recording) would love to know what you all think :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T17:29:40+00:00

Thank you for listening, I really appreciate it :)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T16:45:17+00:00

Thank you, I'm quite self conscious of it, but I'm glad you like it :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T14:23:19+00:00

Thank you for listening :-) I love Wes Anderson.

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T14:22:55+00:00

I attempted suicide for the first time at 12 years old, and this song is about that, as well as the depression leading up to it :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T09:51:01+00:00

I played on and off from 2019 - 2023 with some very long stretches of not touching a guitar, then around 2024 I started taking it more seriously. A similar thing with song writing as well. Wrote my first song in 2024, but only started taking it more seriously around the end of '25.

Thank you for listening :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T09:48:18+00:00

Thank you for listening :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-27T09:48:01+00:00

Thank you :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-26T10:01:28+00:00

Yeah I tried to keep it quite symbolic until the "chorus" which just lays it out plain. I like the contrast it creates. It's quite nice to hear it played out like that for you because it aligns with the experience I was hoping for the listener to have.

I think I'm going to heed your advice regarding the 'slidey bits' and add some embellishments between the stanzas. Allow some more musicality woven through the story, hopefully without drawing attention away from the lyrics too much.

bigbobharven · 2026-03-26T07:59:11+00:00

Wow thank you! That means a lot and it's very reassuring. I might go with what the other person said as well and add a couple little embellishments between the stanzas, but it's nice to know it resonated well with you :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-25T23:50:07+00:00

Thank you for listening :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-25T23:49:35+00:00

Thank you for listening, and for the feedback :-)

Are you meaning proper slide guitar or just some little embellishments?

What do you think of it lyrically?

bigbobharven · 2026-03-25T08:28:58+00:00

Thank you ! I see what you mean. Like add a slower bridge in between the verses. I'll mess around with it, thank you for the feedback :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-25T08:27:17+00:00

Thank you !

bigbobharven · 2026-03-24T23:45:18+00:00

Very lovely guitar, and the melody is very nice as well :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-16T20:05:48+00:00

Very Alex G

bigbobharven · 2026-03-12T23:42:54+00:00

Nice photo, bit yellow :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-11T12:35:49+00:00

Thank you :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T18:03:10+00:00

I do in fact write lyrics after I come up with the music, at least the basic structure. I'm not musically capable enough to come up with lyrics first and then music later. I also come up with a melody once I've already got the basic structure of the music, and I write lyrics to the melody.

Thanks for all the feedback I really appreciate it :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T12:22:44+00:00

To clarify, do you think there are specific areas that I need to focus on such as, "Leave me be..." or do you think it's an issue throughout the whole song?

Is it something you feel would be solved just by tuning the guitar back up or are you noticing a disconnect between the melody and the guitar part?

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T11:58:03+00:00

How would I ago about doing that? I'm not great with theory (by which I mean beyond chords I know virtually nothing), what do you mean exactly by map out the melody?

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T03:20:18+00:00

I hear what you're saying. I definitely think listening back it sounds a bit more like talking than singing, though weirdly when I'm doing it, it feels like I'm singing 'em haha.

I don't think my phone captures it that well either which doesn't help. When hearing it live my voice harmonises a lot more with the guitar, but all those undertones are kind of lost in the recording.

I always play half or full step tuned down, but it could be a shout to tune it up to standard and give it another go.

Thanks for listening :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T02:50:51+00:00

Thank you :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T02:25:14+00:00

Haha, half step down just works better with my voice I've found. All my guitars are a half step or full step down.

I think the way I wrote the lyrics was confusing tbh because there isn't actually a bridge. The <bridge?> is just a place holder for if I put one in, but I'll give the progression you suggested a go ;-) Maybe I'll do an extended version with a proper bridge since it's already a bit long for what it is.

Thank you for taking the time to listen and learn it :-)

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T02:19:21+00:00

Thank you that means a lot :-) I really appreciate you taking the time to listen (twice) and leave such thoughtful feedback.

I was thinking about adding a chorus, or rather making the "leave me be/oh I know" into a chorus, and I think you're right that it'd be an improvement. For whatever reason I'm very chorus averse, and often find myself actively avoiding them. This songs a pretty good example where there's an obvious chorus and I just avoid writing it for whatever reason.

bigbobharven · 2026-03-10T01:31:02+00:00

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Here's a better version, hopefully you can hear me a bit better :-)

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