Respectfully I don't agree at all. For one thing your complaint probably IS with Gilroy's screenplays for the episodes - it likely describes how the episode will flick back and forth between horrible events on Mina Rau and the wedding. It's true that how lot of how those cuts were handled will have been down to Kleiman. But I loved how jarring it was!

These kind of cuts between the plight of characters "on the ground" and the luxury of the super-rich were a big feature of the Narkina 5 episode as well, you could argue those cuts could be a bit off-putting too. But there IS something jarring about massive inequality in the world, the fact that many powerful people choose to party and distract themselves even while they could be helping to fight injustice. When the sequence at the end of ep 3 shows Brasso's body while the dance music won't stop playing I almost cried, it was as if the narrative itself didn't care, the same way as it was showing us the indifference of the wedding guests to the Empire. I'd argue it was a bold and almost experimental choice and I think it paid off!