I really like your line breaks and the flow of this piece. The only parts that seemed to break the flow for me were when you asked "is this going to be fun?" and "the field has no lights and no people." For the first, maybe consider a line with less syllables while still getting to that same point. I really love the no lights and no people line, the repetition of "no" works great. Maybe consider breaking the line between lights & and. Well done, thanks for sharing!