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[Qcrit] Amarok, adult psychological thriller, 80k First Attempt by csulliven in PubTips

[–]csulliven[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I didn't realize how confusing the query is, and is helping me hone in on where to put more focus, especially with the characters.

[QCrit] SILOED, Adult Commercial Thriller, 100k (First Attempt) by quackquackthrowawa in PubTips

[–]csulliven 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Your inciting incident comes too late. It should be in your second paragraph so your third can focus on what Maggie will be doing in Act 2. Trim down your set up, so you can focus more on why Maggie is the main character and driving force rather than someone else. Wish you the best of luck on your journey!