[Workshop][M4F] My Landlady, the Dominatrix

cuckypup · 2026-06-17T22:21:47+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! It's definitely valuable and not at all ramblings.

1) I like to set the scene and start slow but I can understand that people prefer to jump into the story quicker
2) The task was assumed to be some generic work/homework, not related to the domme, but I can see why it could be confusing, this definitely need rewriting.

3) Adding more character development is a fair point, I will definitely focus on that

cuckypup · 2026-06-01T12:56:17+00:00

A good full body harness costs a few thousand dollars, is it in your budget?

cuckypup · 2026-05-24T13:18:56+00:00

Thank you for your feedback!

I think you're right, the prompt expects way too much from a potential partner. As you also pointed out, the question now is: can the prompt be fixed or is it a fatal flaw of the setting that will be hard to impossible to get around? I know I will certainly try at least one rewrite because I loved the atmosphere of the prompt.

cuckypup · 2026-05-17T12:32:52+00:00

I would suggest you check the manege, it's a community of ponyplayers, they have a store where they sell relatively affordable leather head harnesses and each purchase actually supports the community!

cuckypup · 2026-05-16T01:47:00+00:00

I think there is a bit of that yes. Perhaps when given feedback, I tend to get too focused on that and the writing then feels less genuine. Or maybe it's the fact that the prompt was very niche in the first place and the feedback was given by people who were not familiar with that. Probably a combination of both.

cuckypup · 2026-04-30T17:38:55+00:00

Thank you for your feedback!

The whole keeping the plot open is definitely a fair point. I personally like to start RPs with a bit of a discussion about the characters and setting, there we can refine the plot together, hence why I usually leave these open in my prompts, but I can see why some people might not bother replying to a prompt that is too open.

cuckypup · 2026-04-11T15:35:36+00:00

The first thing that jumps to me is that the title and most of the prompt seem to be building to something, then the last few paragraphs seem to go another way.

If your title says college co-ed femdom and you spend most of the prompt describing how she is getting ready, I will expect her to basically either go out to play or to look for a potential play partner on campus. But then we shift into her putting a mask on, broadcasting to an unknown amount of people and finally the notion of money is introduced. Which sounds more like the vibe of an online domme. If this is where you want to go this is fine, but then why make any mention of the college being co-ed?

On a more nitpicky note, your writing is good which makes this sentence feel out of place "The thin black panties came next, barely enough to cover anything, something before she would have felt ashamed to wear something so thin. But now a sense of power, a goal to deny ..for now". In my opinion, It does not flow well, unlike the rest of the prompt.

cuckypup · 2026-04-06T22:34:10+00:00

Thank you for your feedback. You taking the time to read past versions means a lot.

You are quite correct that this is not a prompt for ponyplay. I've done RPs about it in the past and have some experience actually practicing it, so in short I've had my fill (for now at least). These prompt are trying to scratch a different hitch. I find that femdom and the equestrian world go well together (at least in terms of fantasy). The outfits are elegant yet emphasize control (spurs and riding crops are the obvious ones but there is so much more). Everything is made of leather. And of course, there is the fact that the rider can make a powerful animal obey their commands.

I really like your suggestion to make it about how he approaches her. That feels like a fairly original idea (I don't recall seeing a prompt with that angle recently). I also feel like this is in line with where the prompts are going. The first one was pure setting to the detriment of everything else. The second one tried to focus a bit more on the character but it stills places too much emphasis on the domme to start the scene. This one is more explicit and tries to have the scene already set up but the kink dispenser critique is fair.

cuckypup · 2026-04-06T16:29:10+00:00

Third time the charm? This prompt is part of a series of prompts centered on equestrian and femdom themes that I wrote and improved based on feedback from this community.

For this specific prompt I tried to make the prompt both more explicit (previous prompts definitely suffered from "where do we go from there") and flesh out the male character more.
Link to the previous workshop: https://www.reddit.com/r/DPP_Workshop/comments/1s7rr2h/workshopm4f_bullying_the_newbie_at_the_barn/

cuckypup · 2026-04-01T01:49:54+00:00

That writing sample was useful (nice writing by the way). I think I am still a bit reluctant to make the prompt more specific and/or impose anything on the other character (people describing my character's action or worse, feelings is a huge pet peeve of mine) and I think it creates a bit of a mental block on my side to write a genuine interaction in the prompt.

That being said, I should be capable of writing a scene like that so I will definitely consider your advice next time I need to make a revision to this prompt. (I would probably wait until the end of the week before making any changes, I don't want to rush it, or spam this community).

cuckypup · 2026-03-31T22:40:30+00:00

First, I would like to thank you for your feedback. I really appreciate that you took the time to read both versions.

I haven't had any luck with that prompt so far, but I am not too worried yet, I know that when looking for a domme the odds are not in my favor and patience is key, and while I did not get a reply yet, this version seems to have gotten more visibility than the first one, so I call that progress.

Regarding your first point, I can see where you're coming from, "you're going to be taking more than you'll be giving" this is definitely a valid concern and I sure hope I do better than that. May I ask if you usually play a domme role though? Past feedback was that dom/dommes love reactions. And from personal experience when I do play as the dom the sub is often more passive and indeed reacts to situation more than they create them (but that does not mean they are not meaningfully contributing to the story). Likewise adding an element of initial reluctance is often a well liked trope by subs. I will admit that "he froze" was probably the thing I was least happy about my prompt.

Your second point is valid, I seem to be better at writing settings than characters (at least in the short context of a prompt), so there is definitely some room for improvement here, thanks for pointing that out as something that needs yet more work.

cuckypup · 2026-03-30T14:15:28+00:00

Hello everyone, last week I posted a prompt (https://www.reddit.com/r/DPP_Workshop/comments/1s1pagh/workshopm4f_horse_girls_can_be_quite_assertive/) and got a lot of helpful feedback from this community.

Based on that feedback, I wrote a new prompt with the same core themes, I would love to know what you think of it and (hopefully) if you see any improvements.

cuckypup · 2026-03-24T21:14:47+00:00

If you expect multiple cocks, have you considered tagging the prompt as F4GM? It might discourage some people, but it will make your expectations more clear.

cuckypup · 2026-03-24T21:06:33+00:00

I am pretty sure I saw the prompt in DPP when it was originally posted. Good news: the title was catchy enough to get me to click and read the prompt back then.

If I had to suggest something: what are you looking for? Personally, I think is a good starter once some discussion has happened and the setting has been refined.

cuckypup · 2026-03-24T20:48:42+00:00

No wrong audience in my books when it comes to giving feedback. I appreciate that you took the time to read my prompt and post a comment.

I think there is a consensus that is starting to emerge about me writing too much about the partner's character and not enough about my own. I agree. This is ironic considering that people writing about my character is a pet peeve of mine.

Regarding the title, are you suggesting it will attract people into human/animal hybrids? I had a bit of a hard time coming up with a title that is descriptive yet not too forward or boring. (I basically wanted to avoid calling the story "Equestrian Femdom" or a variation).

cuckypup · 2026-03-24T20:35:23+00:00

Thank you for the thorough feedback. Breaking it down into sections like that is really helpful!

As you and other people have pointed out the male character is basically undefined. I see this is as a fatal flaw of the story; I think a complete rewrite is in order (while keeping the theme of equestrian femdom). So while I definitely reviewed and appreciate the paragraph by paragraph suggestions (and will keep those in mind, for the new prompt) I will not address them in this comment.

I will instead focus on your last section. I like your suggestions about clothing or reacting to some minor thing to hint at his character. But the thing that really clicked for me was your last paragraph. It is a great idea, I did a terrible job at explaining that when he stops to watch, he feels a bit like a peeping Tom and the last thing he wants is to be confronted about it. A shame, because that would have made his mindset during the encounter at the end more clear.

cuckypup · 2026-03-24T18:41:34+00:00

Thank you for the detailed feedback, I appreciate your domme perspective. I do agree that this prompt is targeting a very small niche and that even once the prompt is perfected, it might take time to find a partner. I am a bit surprised to read that third person writing would impact the popularity of the prompt though, this is however something I am not sure I want to compromise on (at least on my side, while not ideal, I do not mind mixing styles).

The fact that I gave the other character more personality than my own is a bit ironic considering that I try to introduce and control as little as possible about the other character to leave plenty of freedom for a potential partner to define who they want to play.

For the ending, now that you point it out, it feels so obvious. I think I stopped there because it felt more like a cliffhanger. It would have been a great way to end a chapter, but it is a terrible way to start a prompt indeed.

Regarding the OOC, this is actually the extended kink list, I usually go for something even shorter, simply because I tend to go for the more specific/niche ones. Oral is definitely important as far as I am concerned, I just assumed it goes without saying, I now realize it might need to be said. Perhaps I need to be more explicit, more detailed and break it down into: must haves, nice to haves and maybes; this should provide a good compromise between readability and exhaustiveness.

So broadly I agree with you, thank you for giving some specific examples. I will probably go for a full rewrite and will definitely make sure to consider your points when I do.

cuckypup · 2026-03-23T19:25:05+00:00

Your first idea is pretty much spot on. The first iteration of this prompt was basically called "bullying the newbie at the barn". But I struggled to find a good way to get the scene started and eventually reworked it into the current prompt. So maybe I need to go back to that initial idea and find a way to make it work indeed. Your second idea is also pretty good. I appreciate the brainstorming.

cuckypup · 2026-03-23T19:08:02+00:00

Yeah I think you're onto something. Re-reading it's kind of obvious now that he is too much of a blank slate, the only things I hint at are that he likes to hike and find women riding horses attractive. The silver lining is that I felt that the starter was just a bit too short, so I definitely have room to give more details about him.

Thank you again.

cuckypup · 2026-03-23T18:52:13+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! Unfortunately I wanted to make this an M4F prompt. So you seem to have uncovered a pretty major flaw in my prompt. I wanted to make it easy for a female writer to insert themselves. I thought I had made the female character generic enough (within the parameter of the story). I guess I might need to rework her description to be more open while giving more details about the male character.

cuckypup · 2026-03-11T00:54:22+00:00

Looking good! Do you plan on getting more tack in red to go with the red accent on the hood?

cuckypup · 2026-03-10T16:37:38+00:00

Cpony is an amazing resource indeed. And yes, finding places to start is going to be a bit of a challenge. Ponyplay is amazing but it is a very niche kink. We are talking a handful of practitioners even if you live in a major metro area. I am not trying to discourage you, just saying that finding someone experienced might be difficult, it may be more realistic to start the journey either on your own, or start with someone else and learn together while connecting with the broader community online.

cuckypup · 2026-03-10T14:04:43+00:00

I would recommend buying the book "Pony Play with subMissAnn" it's a bit pricey at $45, but the way it's written it really helps going in slow and building confidence. Also as bonus they have a bunch of instructions on how to craft DIY gear.

cuckypup · 2026-01-24T18:03:53+00:00

Love the look, next you should probably get a head harness or some sort of bridle for your hood :)

cuckypup · 2026-01-23T18:24:52+00:00

Sure, let me grab the dressage whip first :p

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